Nice piece. I think I will take advice from you and sketch out something for this year. Say if I can discipline myself to even do one WDC(did you mean Writers Digest, I am a subscriber, great magazine), that will be great. I like your way with words. Bye.
maamegrace.
Great story for a great site. The ending was expeced. Story plot arch, just right...what else should I say. I dont have a romantic bestseller yet but I think Sara's port is a great story. I like it very, very, much. Maybe i'll read it again when i feel like getting into a romantic mood.
I love the Oliver character and his lay-back attitude. I think unassuming stars add up to their fame. Generally I liked it.
maamegrace.
I meant to finish reading the whole story before i commented again but I can't help it, i have to.
I like the heat and cold metaphor, it is so appropriate and timely. Good story.
I have read all your work and somehow i feel the melancholy that somehow flow through. It is emotionally daunting and beautiful in that sad way. i wish you all the best and May God make it well for you with a bright shining star.
And oh, I wish to let you know that whatever lead you to write such sombre poems, God is still in control.
Is this based on a life story? If it is then I think its over time you checked into a shelter and re-think about your future. Permit me to print this for use with some of the women I sometimes work with.
Your poem resonates a vivid cry of the spousal-abused-syndrome client.
From work experience, I know that the perpetrator often does not leave so the victim will have to leave. It will be nice to show the person the door but you have to think about yourself.
Where are you so we can check the shelters in that area (don't freak out, it's the social worker in me speaking). You can check my portfolio and contact.
My heart is renting, I only hope this is just fiction!
maamegrace.
Nice piece but what form of writing is this?
Also the title, maybe you'll re-think it. I will pick from your prose this:home IS where the heart is,' for the title or 'if dreams were not beautiful...'
I like the concept and it is very thought provoking--motivational as well.Good job.
I'm sure this story is some kind of a vampire avenger for sex offenders. Very imaginative and entertaining. A bit deep though. I almost stopped reading, I'm not into erotica but then the plot caught me and I read on. I think it is well written and I don't know if you can tone down a bit so to get people to read who may not like deep things. Well-crafted!
Nice poem but I think, let's should be lets and it's in that context should also be its. Maybe you may want to take a second look and fix them.
If they were contractions for 'let us' and 'it is' then that will be okay but that doesnt fit in the sentence structure and they are neither possessive pronouns.
Hope you'll be fine with this.
maamegrace
Dear Megan,
I just finished reading your romance between Kitty and Aniston--good spin on it, as usual great!
You actually took liberties with the kissing, remember it was that time of decorum and chaperone and one foot distance between lovers and all those propriety nonsense. But I like your spin, who cares, he loved her and they were alone.
Also your Kitty looked more like Mary to me (the musician) or that's also another spin?
I like your ending but I was wondering, how on earth could a person in trade like a lawyer, afford an estate like pemberly and in london?
I hope I'm not being a pain....
You know I love all your spins on Jane Austen's stories.
I'll be back later.
with love and best wishes,
maamegrace.
I came into your portfolio to read some more of your writings and I love your poems. They just that...no masking, not effusion, just the bare fact that touches the emotions--raw and classic. I'll be writing your writings now and then.
I will call this poem by the last sentence: the melodies of my heart. It is beautiful. I will give you the highest rating. I love it just like that. I don't know why--it has some vulnerability about it like a first, thriving love:
"I was...when you came to me..."
as well as the innocence of the novice. And at last in the, midnight silence, like after the day is over, after that love has been tried and tested by time, a eflection... great!
This first kiss looked very much like one I described in an unpublished novel I will later upload. The hero apologised but when I checked with the age-group (mostly teen to early twentys) I wrote the novel for, they told me that these days the boys don't apologise for spontaneous kisses. But I prefer when they apologise, it makes the romance decent and add it's own flavour--respect and appreciation.
I guess I'm not reviewing anymore, don't worry, I'll sum up at the end. Or draw your attention when I notice something that needs to be fixed. But truly, It's a good story. Did you publish it?
Great story-will continue later.
I notice that you put thoughts in single quotes, I don't know if that is done. Maybe you might want to check with some others.
I am in love with your story. It is very relaxing romantic piece.
Great coincidence (I mean the plot curve). It is good. I found a fewmistakes, sorry, I'm not into fixing now maybe another time. I have to move on with the story.
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