I like this poem a lot. I especially love this verse "Thoughts that mutate me into A confusing, yet joyous wreck." the word mutate mixed in there really tells me that this person has changed your life. Thank you for sharing this poem.
This is a good poem. I liked the points you brought up about why they should let you be the one. I think some rewording and removing some of those buts would give you a higher rating. A good poem. Thank you
This poem has a great message. I like the stages that the man goes through here and what he needs to do. I just had a problem with the flow of the poem. It was slightly choppy and interrupted my intake of the message. Overall it was an excellent poem. Thank you.
I think that this could be something great because I do see good character interaction. Dialogue is a crucial part of any story and you seem to have that sequence down pretty good. The ending (and I know you said you have to add more) kind of seemed just a little flat. And did he mean parlay? Keep at it I believe you'll do great.
It is a great poem to honor a friend. I am sorry for your loss. Your poem is quick and to the point sometimes based on the situation that is the way they need to be. Thanks for sharing.
LOL This was a poem that was entertaining. I like your freestyle. My poems tend to be that way. I don't know anything about rhyming schemes, who that iambic pentameter stuff so I just wing it. I liked your story and I hope you had as much fun writing it as I did reading it.
This is a great story if introspection. I can imagine many crazy things will go through a persons head when they know they are going to die soon. I think it would be hard to just go through the motions and I think you did a good job of portraying this mans dilemma and demeanor. It was well written.
I like the very last line where you say you remember everything do they? Relationships are roller coasters and often times people get off before the ride is over. I like how you showed the good memories with the bad and how you saw the person at their best and worst and were still there for them. To be honest I was a little leery of the poem because the repitition of I remember. Sometimes repetition poems tend to lose their audience but you did a good job of keeping it interesting and by throwing in the different last line it finished off the poem perfectly. Good Job!
This was a good tale. It had some good moments of suspense. I would love to see this expanded upon to get more info from before the point where the story started. It was a great read.
This is quick and to the point. I recently lost my six month old baby and know what it is like to lose someone and ask God why? I liked your poem it just needed to be checked for spelling errors to get a five rating. A good poem nonetheless.
This is a a great poem with a some key touching moments. The imagery of his face being like "glorious sunrise containing an array of colors
scattered across the horizon". This is an incredible visual to start the poem off with. Then there is the next few lines that have him being everything making her feel like she was the only one. The last lines show her feelings of love and her ability to give as well as receive. Very Nice.
It is great that you are able to give us this account and bring us into the perspective of an epileptic and what we can expect. I know that some people have a hard time handling the situation when someone has an epileptic seizure but I am thankful that your article is helpful. I also gained insight into the mindset of an epileptic which is as one would expect to be treated fairly. Thank you.
This had some nice imagery and a nice setting for the forest. It had some noticeable grammar errors and that is the only reason why I didn't give it a five. I enjoyed your style.
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