Oh wow that is cool. I could see the house as if I were standing in it myself. You did a great job putting in the rhymes in so that I can understand it. But I mostly love that there is feeling in this. That is one of the reasons I kept reading and the other was because I liked it. I like the part when you said 'Rooms empty just like my heart by the people in my life who've disapperared' That was a good way to put it. Thanks for taking the time to write this. Keep up the good work.
~Mattie
I read this while I was having breakfast and I was glad it did. I couldn't stop reading it. my favorite part was when you explained what the sounds were in the background. It gave me more of a view or the place they were. I also liked that you explained where Ian came from. So yes I loved reading this and I hope you can keep up all the good work.
~Mattie
Oh my gosh that is awesome. I love how you put this all together. It is great work and I was a little surprised at the end. I love the way you explained what they were doing as if it were happening in the house. I'm glad I got to read this. Thanks for putting it up so that that was possible. Keep up the good work!
~Mattie
WOW! I was about to click the random read button again but when I started reading I was hooked in right away. I believe that you put a lot of feeling into this and that made it meaningful to read. The part that meant the most to me was the part where you wrote 'The bed that had known two, Looked strange, I just could not sleep.' All together I gotta say that I am glad that I didn't click then button again. Thank you very much for putting this up.
~Mattie
Even though it was short it was discriptive enough for me to be able to see it like a see things on a television. It also, in my opinion, has tons of feeling put into it. I love the 'like a hawk finding pray' part. That was an awesome way to describe her hearing. Thanks so much for putting this up.
~Mattie
Wow I love this! I could see everything you wrote in my head like a movie and I like the 'china heart' part you wrote and well everything else. I know for a fact that I couldn't write something as cool as this and I am happy that I was able to find this. That is why I gave this a 5 because you put time into it and made it enjoyable for people to read.
Dang! That is awesome. It is hard to explain kinda but here it goes. It really does make me think of rain and I know that if I ever try to write this then it wouldn't nearly come out as good as this did!! Really this is great! I'm glad that I read this. Thanks for putting it up!
~Mattie
It was almost like I could feel the feelings of this poem. I hope that that don't sound cheesey cause it's not! I was surprised as I read this because I normally don't like poems about peoples feelings but I really did like this one because for starters I can relate and because in my opinion, you put quite a lot of feeling into this piece. That is why I acually like it.
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