This was a very creative story! I really enjoyed reading it :) The cereal bits having names was funny. The part about them whining in the bowl, complaining and wishing Henry was there to help, was great. Very cute story, thank you for sharing it! :)
This was very funny! It was much longer than the other Mad Libs I've tried so far. Thanks for making me laugh :)
The best part was this section: The first American looking restaurant we came to was called the The Moldy Fork. I hoped the title wasn’t implying anything. Judi and I ordered veggie burgers with fries. But later when the waiter came back with the food, He had brought us fluffy cookies with fries. He said that they had ran out of veggie burgers. So we had fries for lunch. And the forks WERE Moldy! I noticed some customers had brought plastic forks.
These are great! Your word-pictures are enough to motivate me to get started on my detailed character sheets. I keep putting it off but it needs to be done. :)
My favorite is the first one, but they're all nicely written. Easy to see the picture of each person in my mind.
If it's okay to point out, there were a couple spelling errors. Hopefully I'm not giving bad advice, my apologies if I am!
In the second line:
You have costomary, I think is spelled customary
After Jean introduces herself:
You have accesories, I think it's accessories
When Andrew (I think?) begins to explain how the crime was commited, he says she inserted the wrapper into the door and how Mr. Rook "looked it". That didn't make sense, was it supposed to be "locked it"?
I think the story was interesting, thank you for sharing it! I'll add it to my favorites so I can try to remember to read more of your writing in the future :)
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