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Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
Hi tara:

I did like the concept of the story being classic vampires satire.

It seems to me that there should have been more clarity as to where and when

this all took place.

Maybe in my reading I missed who was telling this story.

To me needed there to be more of an explanation about the different groups.

There wasn't any information on that matter that left you wondering me much.

The battle scene was more clearer than the reason of the plot.

The naming of the characters is what kept your attention.

There were some typing errors of words but not a serious issue.

Long paragraph at times loses me that is me and not you.

Thank you,
Ice
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Review of Thru The Dark  
Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: E | N/A (Unratable.)



Hi shaggypayne:

That is a very nice point and well said.

Thank You,
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Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: E | N/A (Unratable.)



Hi shaggypayne:

Nice prayer poem for yourself.

Thank You,
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Review of A Life to Come  
Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



Hello Tilor:

I must say that whether your story was Fiction or non fiction it was perfect ineveryway.

Your story kept my attention forom beginning to end.

Man that was greater than great and if was true sorry for your lost and if is nonfiction you left a wonderful lesson to be learned at a sad time.

Thank you,
You made The Ice Man Melt... LOl...
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Review of It's Life  
Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: E | (2.5)



Hi Adrielle:

I really tried to folow your train of thought. there are a fw things in your thinking I could question.

How I could realy grasp what you were saying but despite that we I need to hear your feeling more so than your emtion.

For me sometime we get lost in our ideas and that was a very good job.

Thank You ---- very well done -------
Ice
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Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: E | (3.5)


Hello Tanya:

Very well said and can relate to many events which he do fit into some of mine.
Nice and shall be around a long time.
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Review of God, Who Are You?  
Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: E | (3.0)


Hello Intuey:

Nice point of expression but in your excellent way of expressing your thought it leaves be asking questions rather than pondering.

Are you actually saying we are the same as The almighty and that is not a question nor an apologetic just a point of matter good job.

Thank You,
The Ice Man.
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Review of Vanishing  
Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: E | (2.5)



Hello qaz4

I was really trying to see whether or not that I wanted to be there as well, yet have questions on that saying..

Thank you
Ice man
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Review of Whisper Of A Name  
Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Elemenopy:

Your story was great and I followed you all the way> the way you told it come from a great mind and wonderful suol and spirit..

You have the gift of comfort. In each line you wrote made your excellent point.

Your wiriting is a great art.

But your writing is not your gift.

If by chance you don't know your gift vs your art your powerful writing will lead you to your gift.

Very good job and none in this plane and realm can do any better.

Thank you.
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Review of Moment of Clarity  
Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

Hello Don Quixote:

After reading your efforts of prose it is put together like my grandmother's hand made quilts that kept the chill off us in a worn drafty house of our sharecropping days.

Trust me that is good.

You put that together very well.

I can see why you have a 13+ rating.

Your words are so-so clear to me so-clear.

I would that I could impart more on this matter for
It is comsuming my essence and I do have the
answer whereby you at time eluded to it.

Much of my review of your work is in some of my
writing and touching most of them.

Great effort,
thank you,
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Review of Sweet Dreams (2)  
Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: E | (2.0)
Indeed a thought provoking dream especially for the believers.

In the first paragraph, it seem to me that there are two points.

The flow of the thought seem ot over run the point of the dream..

The second paragraph seem to have a more of a readable flow that was very good.

The longest paragraph made the point of the dream come to life. What have me wondering and asking questions is that it was a direct condeming dream.

It seem to me there is more time spent on trying to win people to your belief than allowing the dream to define its given message.

A few more transitional words may have aided your personal subjectivity more clearer.

Hence, lets be clear dreams are very important to me. they are succor in and of themselves. Your writing was done well. Thanl You.
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Review of Never Again  
Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: 18+ | (2.0)
The story was a horror. I hope one would never have to go through such again.
The story need to be told.
There are moments that are not detail enough. The story meaning has more impact than the wording. still I like the attempt. Keep up the good work and I hope all is well on all accounts.
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Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: E | (2.5)
I truly feel you.. However you leave me thinking you are not gone or you don't want to be gone. There are a few word errors.I really lke it. There are many questions. would like to have seen some answers.

However, again the point is well taken.
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Review of This I Believe  
Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
I found your story to be amazing. The veracity seem to be without question. The way you told the story seems honest.

I have never read a dream where one said they could actuall smell a scent. That part gets my attention.

I am now womdering what heaven looks like according to you, because you only mention a room.
Howver, for me that does not matter I know there is a heaven as well as a hell.

For me it is a good job because you seem sincere.
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Review of Flowing Water  
Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: E | (2.5)
I think that the writer did well in showing it necessary to do the right things to be who you need to be.

The symbols of water, and the dam of it's flowing froce are concepts of living a decent cleanlife.

The ponit of the room seems to imply one need to keep an open mind for positive things.
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Review by Mr.Ice
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)


The Unbearable Brightness of Being, which was read, had one wanting to know what was next. The writer did a fine job relating his explanations. His metaphors were very distinctive in making his points.

The writer speaks concerning the differences in people, he said, "What differentiates me"? He does an especially excellent job correlating the reality of colors in the world, whereby not any should have reason to be unjust because of a person’s race.

He did well of keeping his delusion out of the comprehension to figure out neatly by the reader. Is not philosophy defined and designed to keep one from not guessing about reality? I am just thinking rational.

He made his point in processing disillusionment for his reader. However one would like to know his conclusion on the matter, is life real or better still was his love one real.

The reader cannot know his mind. Reality is what it is and disillusionment is what is. Would not philosophy guide us to that point of what is real and what is not real?

The writer is a good conveyer of thoughts but is there a need of using big words necessarily to make his point clearer?

Was his intention designed to convey the true meaning of reality or unreal or is life a dreamlike? Farther more are we left with the thought that a perfect love that ends is some otherworldly being? Overall the writer wrote was captivating and left one asking relevant questions.

My I say Thank you great work of art.
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