Henry Chillingsworth's (mr.rekon) Reviews

Oh god... the title alone kills this before it starts. The color scheme drives the wooden stake through my forlorn heart. Don't try to jazz your words up with gimmicks. It doesn't help anyone.

5

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#3983265

Review of Searching

Review by Henry Chillingsworth

Rated: E

| (2.0)

aren't we all? The title's no good. The content is universal. Show me don't tell me.

6

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#3983263

Review of Weak

Review by Henry Chillingsworth

Rated: E

| (3.0)

I like the overall tone and message. There's sometnhing eternal about what you're trying to say. Your straignt-forward style is effective. However, it won't get you anywhere. Not in serious poetry circles. Confessional is good. Obvious lacks imagination. Give it some spice. Make it less obvious. Give examples and don't explain them. Let your reader figure it out.

7

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#3983254

Review of The grass is much greener

Review by Henry Chillingsworth

Rated: E

| (1.0)

Ugh.. I didn't get past the first two lines. A cliche in the first. An inappropriate abbreviation in the second.

8

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#3983253

Review of The Wall

Review by Henry Chillingsworth

Rated: E

| (4.0)

I like it. If there was more to it, it would have gotten a five. Good work. The fewer words the better.

9

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#3983252

Review of The Hiroshima Bowl

Review by Henry Chillingsworth

Rated: E

| (1.0)

Is there a typo in your first sentence? I can't get past that. You have no credibility if you err. so early.

10

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#3983250

Review of Finally Free

Review by Henry Chillingsworth

Rated: E

| (3.0)

I like how you juxtapose fantasy and religion.You've done a good job of giving both weight without leaning toward one or the other. I question the title. How can you make it less fantastic and more real? Readers need reality. Details. Something they can relate to. I do like the complexity of your language. You're not far.

11

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#3983249

Review of One by One

Review by Henry Chillingsworth

Rated: E

| (3.0)

You almost had me. What goes by? I need more details. Even if they're undefined.

12

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#3983245

Review of The mighty ways of our Lord.

Review by Henry Chillingsworth

Rated: E

| (2.0)

Ugh...reading this kind of poem is tiresome. I didn't get past the second line. You can say the same thing without being so heavy-handed.