ok, here is what I found. The title makes it sound like her first name was Agatha. You keep calling her Christy. That is a little bit confusing to me. Run this word thru the spell checker:Mespotamia. I don't know how to spell it corectly but misspelled words bring down the rating a little. You might not want to use 10 little Niggers. The Word Niggers is inflamatory, Derogatory, and its a racial slur. racial slurs are called fighting words. My husband is black, that would hurt his feelings if he saw it. And any other black person that reads your work. You mention twice the Divorce in 1926. Just the second one has more detail. You can leave it like that, it fits in. other than what I have pointed out there are no mistakes. Nice job.
This is good it reminds me of a lot of things I don't like to talk about. But it also lets me know I'm not the only one and I feel comforted by this. thank you. It makes me want to keep trying and be strong. You know there is this old saying that says it is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.
Remember that and take comfort in the fact that you had the opportunity to love some one. And never be afraid to love you never know when the right one will come along. Besides you can gaurd your heart all you want but eventually, some one will walk right thru those walls and you'll never see it coming until they are all you can think about and you find your self wishing they were with you every minute of every day.
I thought this was pretty good. It kinda hit home. I had a near death experience and while I lay unconcious and not breathing from an athsma attack I saw this "light" maybe it was my brain registering the last thing I saw before death. had the doctors not pulled out the diffibrulator or how ever the hell you spell that I would be dead now. also I had an Iv going and heart monitors I was intibated and placed in the Icu with a ventilator breathing for me. kinda scarry huh? I have made a full recovery there is no brain damage due to lack of oxygen or any thing else lucky me huh?
I know the feeling. My mom claims she never beat me but I have the scars to prove it. she claims that when my uncle attacked me she never called me a liar. if thats true why did I get slapped? why did she ground me to my room for a whole year on my birthday? why did I stop trusting her? why did I get put in foster care with a split lip? like I said I've been there too. just keep your head up and don't let anyone tell you it didn't happen. You know it did. what ever happened to you will probably stick with you for life. Remember you know the truth whether they want to admit it or not.
I was looking for any one I hadn't yet rated or reviewed and I found this. It sounds like something has really thrown you into turmoil. Don't beat yourself up. Just learn from your mistakes. Forgive yourself and learn. this won't be easy but believe me I have been there myself and I'm only 19. You have to accept your mistakes, forgive yourself, and then learn from them. good luck to you. this will be difficult but don't give up.
Beautiful. You have done some fine work. keep it up. I would like for you to e-mail me when you create a new item. You can reach me at mrs.ulmer@writing.com
thank you.
the story was wonderful although I may have found some spelling errors. They don't matter to me though. I loved the story. It was beautiful and not what I expected.
OUCH!!!! I hate the person or people who did this to you. I am sorry you suffered. They will get what they deserve one day. Keep your head up and to hell with child abusers and wife beaters. I'm sorry I get so angry when I know another person has been tormented the same way I was.
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