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Review of lost child  
Review by Huny Bun
Rated: E | (3.5)
The content of your story is good. You need to clean up some of the grammar and mis-spelled words though. Like "wasn't even shoes on her feet" Next line: going should be go and then again "walk to the door" should read walked to the door,. "small little child" Small and little mean the same thing. choose one or the other. Lots of mis-spelled words. Just take your time and read through your write. It's a wonderful story. I can see you have talent. I hope you aren't offended by my honesty, but we are here to help one another. I'm looking forward to reading more from you. God Bless
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