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Review by Patrece ~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Initial Impression
A very playful and cute poem which I did enjoy, as I love to tend to a garden of my own. I did enjoy reading this poem.

Suggestions
For the most part this flowed nicely, but there were a couple of lines that seemed like they could use an extra word in them to keep the rhythm going in a smoothly readable way.

Overall Impression
A light-hearted and fun read. You certainly are a rising star! Keep up the good work!


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127
Review by Patrece ~
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
I have enjoyed reading your short story. See below, my review of it. These are only suggestions, and you are free to take them or leave them! None intended to be discouraging, just intended to help you make the most of this short piece.

Overall Impression
Very creative writing! it was interesting and easy to follow! The poor lass was doomed to a life with someone she did not care to be with. When offered her choice of gift, she made a choice she felt would help her escape the situation. She did wish she had been a bit more specific in her "wish", but it still served her needs, just not as she had anticipated, exactly.

Suggestions
Just a few of things I noticed that you may want to take a look at.
* In the first sentence, after the fourth word (wings)...I think a comma may need to be there.
*In paragraph 11, the last word should be appeared not appear.
*In the last line, there may need to be a comma after the words Lake Mist.
*Just a few more details on the girl and the prince, to make the characters come a bit more alive to the reader would be desirable.

General Comments
A very cute and entertaining story line! I would enjoy seeing it expanded to a full story if that is in your plans for the future. You have a unique story and that is a wonderful thing! keep up the great imaginative work!
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128
Review by Patrece ~
Rated: E | (5.0)
Overall impression

Typically when I do a review, I break it down into several areas. But due to the subject, length and clarity of this writing, it would not be practical for me to do so.

This is a very clearly written piece, it is super easy to follow and provides the reader with specific how-to information they would be seeking in reading it. I know for new users here, it is a gem of a piece. It simplifies what took me 30 minutes to sort through on my own when I first started here just a couple of weeks ago! You do not cloud the tutorial with unneeded extras that would only serve to distract the reader. GREAT JOB!

Patrece
"Just do the next WRITE thing!"


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129
Review by Patrece ~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
WOWWWWW. This is extremely powerful, and well written! I found myself disappointed when it ended so quickly. Keep on keeping on with this.
As far as constructive criticism, I truly can't find anything about it which I would suggest changing at this point, except for one little spot where I thought may a comma could have been used, but then I could be wrong. (He visited villages(,) along with my mother(,) and passed out food and other rations to those hungry for more than just the Word.)

I really need to learn a little html to set things off.

Anyhow, I think this is awesome, and look very forward to reading more very soon!


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