You have a beautiful use of extended vocabulary, and a very intensive motivation to do all that you have done in this poem. I loved it, but I have an urking for sea creatures, and your story filled the hole in my stomach that I couldn't fill with food. Thanks.
I hate the concept of the story. I'm very truly sorry, but I do. I love the names of all your characters, but I dont get it. Please Email me and tell me where your point is to all this, because I'm let astray. If I were to read it a couple more times, maybe then I'd get it, but for now, I do not. Thanks.
I don't really understand the point of your book. I apologize, but I dont. If you clarified your ideas in an orderly state, and organized it, It would make it a whole lot easier to read. I love your word choice, and some organization techniques you used, but others are pointless.
You know, I dont really like the thought of the story, but Your idea was great.Your DAD gave you the Idea?! Are your parents split apart? Sorry for the question, but my dad says stuff like that all the time, and my parents are split apart. I love how you added in that the souls are in there. I'm a dark person. ;)
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