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159 Public Reviews Given
168 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I will say what I liked about your piece and if I have any suggestions for improvement. My reviews are usually short, sweet and to the point. I prefer to review short stories but will look at poetry if asked to.
I'm good at...
finding mistakes with grammar/punctuation. Also I can let you know if your plot is effective.
Favorite Genres
Religious, romance, sci-fi, fantasy
Least Favorite Genres
erotica,sports
Favorite Item Types
Statics - short stories
I will not review...
anything overly sexual or violent, anything anti-Christian
Public Reviews
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Rootcreator,

This is a beautiful poem.

No suggestions for improvement.

Thanks for sharing!

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello St. Francis,

This is a cool poem. I like the rhyme and rhythm.

No problems to fix.

Keep writing great poems!

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Review of The Fox  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jacky,

I love this. I love the message and how it features my favorite animal. Nothing to fix and well done.

Thanks for sharing!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jacky,

This is short and sweet. I like it. I see nothing to improve upon.

Nice work!
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Review of Explaining My Son  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Kenzie,

Wow! You've done an excellent job shedding light on Asperger's. I am sure there are many readers who will take comfort from this. Derek is lucky to have you for his mom. You've done a great job advocating for him. Thank you for sharing your interesting story.

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Review of A Heart's Dream  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello HuntersMoon,

This is another beautiful poem. Very well written. You have a knack for poetry.

Keep writing great poems!
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Review of Idyll  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello HuntersMoon, Puppet Master here to review your poem.

It's a good poem. I can find nothing wrong with it. I like the atmosphere it creates.

Keep writing great poems! And congrats on the awardicon!

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Review of Lost Umbrella  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Adminn, Puppet Master here to review your story.

It's short and sweet. My only criticism is that it's mostly "told" rather than "shown". Instead of saying how she felt and the conversation where she found the umbrella you could show it more.

It is still a pleasant and uplifting read. Thanks for sharing and keep writing!

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello KiyaSama,

This is brilliant and funny! I like it.

No technical issues. It's well done.

Keep writing!

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Review of The Caring Soul  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Naomi,

This is a sweet and beautiful story. It was so noble of the lady to give up her bed for someone else. You do a good job portraying her.

The story is technically sound.

It's nice that this is a true story and that both the lady and the man she helped recovered. The part about the thank you note was sweet.

Good job!

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Review of Masquerade  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Jacky, Puppet Master here to review your story.

It's a good start. I would recommend building onto it some more, however I understand if you had a word count limit for the contest.

I suggest modifying the punctuation in the end of the first paragraph. For example:

"...with a bit of wine in it. She sipped it down. Wine for breakfast? Why not?"

This has potential, and it's a good story. With a little work it could be even better.

Keep writing!

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Review of Mariah  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello strlcuckoo, Puppet Master here to review your poem.

Thank you for the review request.

The diction and imagery are good. So is the rhythm and rhyme scheme.

I cannot see anything wrong with it. It is well done.

The quote at the beginning does a good job of introducing and explaining the poem.

Keep writing great poems!

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Review of Death  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Benjamin, PM here to review your poem.

I like it. It's well written and has no flaws.

Keep writing great poems!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Prosperous Snow, Puppet Master here to review your poem.

It's beautiful and well written.

Not sure if it's a Balassi stanza because the last line has 6 syllables.

I do like it, though. I especially like the spirituality of it. Good job!

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Review of Crash  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Eight-7, Puppet Master here to review your story.

Thank you for the review request.

It is well-written, insightful and believable. I like how Johnny chooses to be a better dad even after his mistake of drinking again.

My only suggestion for improvement would be to give it a better defined plot.

Keep up the good work!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Choconut,

This looks like a great activity! Thanks for making it.

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Review of BEST INVESTMENT  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Naomi, Puppet Master here to review your item.

Thank you for your reviews. I would like to return the favor.

This is very wise and insightful. It is also well-written and flawless.

Thanks for sharing and congrats on becoming a Preferred Author!

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Review of Doin' A'ight  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Elisa, PM here to review your song lyrics.

I like the positive attitude in this song. Also, it's well written.

Keep up the good work!

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Review of Park Bench  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sumojo, PM here to review your item.

It's beautiful and touching. Also realistic and relatable.

No flaws or issues. It's very well done.

Congrats on the win. It is well-deserved.

Keep writing!

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Review of Christmas Thought  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello strlcuckoo, PM here to review your poem.

It's a pretty good poem with a beautiful message. The rhythm could be tweaked a little and I would spell "borne" without the e at the end. But overall it is still well written.

Good job and keep writing. You seem to have a knack for poetry.

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Review of Star  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, PM here to review your poem.

I enjoyed this poem. It's beautiful and well written. I wouldn't change anything.
The rhythm and rhyme scheme work well together and the diction is good. I also like the message.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello augusta123, PM here to review your story.

Welcome to W.Com! I hope you enjoy your time here.

This is beautifully written. No spelling or grammatical errors. My one suggestion is that there's a lot of "telling" but not much "showing". By that I mean you could show the father's love by what he does and not just saying it.

You're off to a great start! Keep writing!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Dave Ryan, PM here to review your contest entry.

It's funny. I like the teacher's interjections. They're amusing.

Welcome to the site and good luck in the contest!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello bn skinner, PM here to review your story.

It's interesting and well-written. I am sorry it actually happened.

Only one small correction:

Yet you were on your . . . you're missing a quotation mark at the end.

Welcome to the site and keep writing!

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Review of Moments of Choice  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Mark Mywords, PM here to review your article.

It's very true and profound. Sharing this could help alot of people. Thanks for writing this.

Well done.

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