This piece brought me to tears because It feels as though you darn near wrote a segment of my own life. I hope that it is ok that I share this with my husband, because people try to make me seem overdramatic when I try to explain that this is what they do to me.
This is a great piece of work. And the thing that I like most about it, is that you are accepting and not being judgmental or hypocritical of the new generations and type of people that come into the church house. We are all his children. He doesn't discriminate and neither should we.
From reading this it seems like she is the one for you Tim. Feelings like this don't happen all the time and sometimes don't happen at all for some. She seems like a great woman by what I read. Make sure you continue to love her and don't let her go.
Nice piece of work. I would just like to know what made you chose this perspective on God? Was this always your outlook on God for you to have written with such ferocity? Nonetheless Pooja Shah, it is an eye opener and a think piece. Keep up the good work.
This piece does remind me of when I was a child. Like I can feel the wind on my face and the grass beneath my feet. That innocence in us & the beauty of nature itself. The flow is great; it goes together, but is a little bounce as if a child were to be speaking it.
The ending took me for a whirl, like who are these people, I was confused for a moment. But overall it was cute. Something of what a typical newly wed couple would do/argue over. Tim and Beck seem like an adorable couple. And putting DIAPERS ON MICE. Flippin' GENIUS!!
I love the sensory details of this piece. It made me feel like I was in a chilly setting looking for a sweater and some hot chocolate. Then, as Mathias began to speak of Tad, my motherly instincts kicked in and I wanted to just help take care of him too. No matter how old he is, he's still someone's baby that deserves decent love and care.
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