Great story...well written and heart breaking....You stated that she took $400 from you and you had no choice but to press charges because the money was too much. Would you behave the same way if she was your biological daughter?...i am just being curious....i am not trying to question the unconditional love that you have for this girl....it sounds like this girl has serious psychological problem through no fault of her own...i doubt God will be able to do anything for this girl because if he could have done something he would have prevented this girl to be in that situation at the first place...Please keep seeking help because it is your responsibility not God's....
Very nice article....it shows that you have a deep understanding of the US foreign policy...it also shows that you are very much against this country's current foreign policy(correct me if i am wrong)....the only thing i did not notice from your writing was the good side of this country's foreign policy...do you think it has a good side?
Please read, rate, and review my article when you have a chance.....
4th pararagraph and 4th sentence i think you by mistake say her solved instead of he solved...other than that great article very inspiring...Please read, review and rate my article when you have a chance....
First paragraph and sentence one: a semi- colon is not needed after 2007...a coma is the best way to go...
i notice you have used semi- colon abusively please refrain from doing that....
AS IF IT WERE A CHOCOLATE BAR...YOU ARE TALKING ABOUT A PIECE OF PAPER THEREFORE IT CAN NOT BE "AS IF IT WERE" AS IF IT WAS IS THE BEST WAY TO GO...
I WAS IN COMPLETE DENIAL...NOT I WAS IS COMPLETE DENIAL
OTHER THAN A FEW GRAMMATICAL, AND PUNCTUATIONS ERRORS, YOU HAVE DONE A DECENT JOB CONVEYING YOUR MESSAGE....
Great article....It sounds very emotional and it seems you are very passionate about the chosen topic. I notice a few punctuation problems but you have done a great job conveying your message...Keep up the good work...Please read and rate my article whenever you have a chance.
You have given only one side of the story.Therefore, your article lacks objectivity and people will hesitate to accept the information given in your article as true. You show that you are on the side of the Palestinians too much. Other than its lack of objectivity, it is a great article. Please be careful with your punctuations because i notice punctuation problem in your article
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