This is a lovely poem!! It reminded me of a poem out of "The Sidwalk Ends". It just had a certain charm about it. I found no mistakes and it flowed beautifully. The rythmn is the best part of it. It kind of danced through my mind as I read it. I also thought the subject of the poem was fun. A secret, invisible friend! I loved it! Great Work!
You have a great story here with a great moral. It had just a few typos. That's the only thing I saw. I enjoyed reading this and I liked the way it ended with him being a better person. Great Work! Welcome to Writing.com. I look forward to reading more from you in the future.
I loved this story. It is so true how people get advice about things when they find out what you've been studying at college. This was funny and just a joy to read. I found no grammer mistakes and I loved the way the dialog read. It is one of those stories that puts a smile on your face. Great Work!
First off I like how your sory is placed inside a library. It drew my attention right away and I felt I was inside the library with the characters. You put a good spin on certain situations. I like the idea of a storybook character breaking free and tormenting characters. If anything I would like to understand why.. kind of just like your characters did. Great work though, I liked it very much.
I gave you five stars because your poem radiated out of my mouth with great ease when I read it out loud. It had a great beat to it and it flowed beautifully!! The message was incrediable and you did a great job at explaining the main points. Great Work!!
This is a powerful poem! I saw images of my life flash as I read through this. You write of a dream all of us have. A dream to just be taken as we are no strings attached. Your poem flowed easily and it ryhmed beautifully in places. There is a great potential for you on this web site. Trust me you will love it!! Welcome.
I gave you five starts because I like that you made grief into a person. It was poetic and unexpected. I like that this story is short and bitter sweet, but also teaching a lesson in life. We all have to give in to our pain and embrace it so we can set it aside and move on. I love this. Thanks for the read.
I enjoyed reading this story. I love how it is written to Myra from Ru's point of view. That was a different and refreshing spin on the love story. It allowed me to see into Ru's thoughts and imagine the way Myra would be feeling if she was reading this. It read like a long lost love letter. I found it to be creative and well written. I found myself at the top of the story and at the bottom in no time with no regret. Thanks for the read!
I laughed so many times throughout your story! I was right there with your character feeling almost as frustrated as him wanting to know what the sound was. I found no mistakes and I would change absolutely nothing! This is one of my favorite stories I've read yet on here! Great Work!
This would read beautifully with only a few minor corrections.
First of all, capitalize all of your I's.
Where you say "i want to protect you smile" This should be "I want to protect your smile,"
On lines three, four, and five of your poem, you start with "For" but give no thought to complete this. You could keep the "For" if you change the period after granted to a comma, or just add a reason behind it.
The question at the end of this is powerful and perfect for the ending. I really enjoyed the impact of this item, and the feelings it came from. I can tell just by reading this how writing helps in certain situations. Great work, and keep writing.
I found myself lost in your story and wrapped in a tale of romance and beauty. You writing reads well and it's easy to be right there with your characters. The flowers in the hospital was my favorite part in this story. I found no mistakes to correct. You managed to capture my attention and make me smile a numoruous amount of times while reading this! Great job!!!
This was creative and original. It was strange, all the places a praying mantis was found. I liked how they just poped up everywhere and then the character in the poem had a great day! This was fun to read and I would change nothing. The punctuation was right on and the flow of the poem was excellent. I look forward to reading more from you. Great Work!
This poem made me laugh. It was refreshing and funny and cute at the same time. I like the idea of this poem coming from the little kids point of view. I like how creative you got coming up with things the kid was trying to help his mother with. The puzzle scene was the funniest to me. The use of your commas was interesting and it worked to my knowledge. Keep writing, and welcome to writing.com.
Wow! Steamy! I love the story that was behind these two characters. I like how it's not about what happend to her but about the survival and the love she gets to expierience afterwards. This was a great love story.. and Erotic piece. I enjoyed it. It was sweet and sexy at the same time.
awww.. I loved this one. It's my favorite so far. I lover romance stories and stories of fighting for love and rescuing the other person. I really enjoyed reading this. It was written well and as short as it was it was full of life and love. I like how you wrote about each character seprately before writing about them together. Great work. I am impressed.
I found no mistakes in this poem and I absolutely love it. What a great thing to write about. I find the idea of children playing in the snow a clasic way to think of happiness and great childhood memories. This made me feel warm inside and also feel the cold of the snowy day in the back of my mind. You were vivid and creative with your words, and they sent a spark through me. Great Work!!!
I did this contest one year. I ejoyed it. I love how your letter aplies to only your writing and your self disipline to keep up the hard work. I enjoyed reading this. All of your ideas and goals for yourself were displayed with not only honesty to the readers but honesty to yourself. It was a great eye opener and very inspiring to myself. Great work once again!
You captured the grief and hurt of this character with dignity and grace in this short story. I enjoyed reading it. I like reading sad things, it's wierd. This was really good. I found nothing I would change. I loved how you described the characters emotions before you explained what happend to her child. It was sad and bittersweet. Nice work!
I found nothing I would change. I enjoyed reading this story about a soldier and his ability to be at home with his loved ones enjoying a celebration for our country. Your words came together well and held my attention. I was able to visualize exactly what you meant the reader to visualize. Great Work. I can tell I am going to enjoy raiding your port.
This was sweet and sincere and I enjoyed reading it. It was if you were personally thanking me.. and everyone else. A very sweet letter. I think everyone should stop and think about the imapct writing.com members have on our lives. The reviews and ratings are important, and just the thought that someone we don't personally know has taken the time out of their day to read our work is a wonderful feeling. You touched base on all of this so good in this letter. Thank you as well. I have thouroughly enjoyed raiding your port. It has been a pleasure and will be coming back to read more of your work.
I love the photograph at the top. I am excited to write something for this contest. I'm thinking about it. I really liked the way you laid this out and made it so easy to follow, showing the rules, and posting the rewards. It makes it easier for contestents to enter. The whole layout is enviting and enticing. You should have a lot of fun reading the entries. Great work on this.
I thought this was good. I enjoyed the love hidden deep within it. I loved how you opened up the poem. "From the ground up we built it." It led me into the depths of the rest of the poem. I was interested to know what was built, and what would happen! Great Work, I was moved by it. Especially at the end when you wrote "but I say only that I love you like there is a tomorow."
This was great! I am glad you won first place. It was dark and depressing, but I enjoyed reading it! I am a sucker for intriguing yet sad poetry! I loved the rhythmn you used, and the line you saw to late. It was all good! Wonderful job, and congratulations!
I love all your writing, but this one really deserves five stars, as they all did! I love how you write these poems based on the story you are writing! I am interested in the story. This poem grabbed me and it did not let me go. It was the work of a true writer. It was exeptional to read and I look forward to reading more from you.
The last paragragh in this sent my rating up to five stars. It worked well how you described this prose. You have mastered the ability to chanel your thoughts and put them down. It is a great exercise, and it makes for a great prose. This reminds me of a daydream waiting to be released. I did not find any gramer mistakes. Great Work!
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