Raimusha's (raimusha) Reviews

Raimusha

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#4750128

Review of A real nightmare

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

burdens weighing on me : The family, the job and all I had to do i no longer had any time for leisure.

Family life is like an eternal whirlwind. Respect to yall.

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#4750126

Review of Training Camp

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Very well written.

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#4750125

Review of Water shortage Problem

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Rated: E

| (3.0)

Your article could be enhanced by focusing on a particular area. Why not focus on water shortage in India?

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#4750122

Review of Love for poetry

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Feel what I feel. Blissful in a miserable world.

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#4750120

Review of What Am I?

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

I feel humbled.

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#4750119

Review of That Big Beautiful Tree

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

I love it!

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#4750104

Review of HOTEL CALIFORNIA

Review by Raimusha

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

I enjoyed the story.

My flow was disrupted after reading the first paragraph.

Here is a humble suggestion:

The year was 1989, I was 16 when I ran away from my boring small town in Montana. Today, I am still 16. I'd be 17 had I stayed home.

I believe this will make the first paragraph flow better.

Thank you.

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#4739497

Review of Chapter 032: Reunited

Review by Raimusha

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Overall Impression: The world-building is excellent, making it easy to follow the story and develop an attachment to the characters. The detail on how mana operates through Arista and Carter's interactions is particularly well done. Carter, depicted as a man of simple means but great utility, is a compelling character. The portrayal of female characters significantly enhances the narrative. The mention of the Arthur sign on Ami piques curiosity about Arthur's role and background.

Additional Thoughts: The scene featuring the blinking dogs was a highlight, showcasing Carter's ability to identify their weaknesses and defeat them with grace. It would be enriching to experience similar detailed battles, especially the encounter with the group of boars, from Carter's perspective, given his warrior skills, in contrast to Arista’s viewpoint.

A point of confusion was the revelation of Carter's gender following the damage to his robe, having initially been perceived as a large man. Perhaps the robe serves to mask his identity? The pronouns in the following section were slightly confusing:

"After hugging, Mari looked over Arista's shoulder and said, 'Shouldn't we be helping her attack those blink dogs?'

'Stop drooling, you two. Arthur would never let you do that,' Arista responded.

'She’s right. I'm surprised he didn’t try to kill him yet,' Mari remarked.

'He tried. He imprisoned us in the spider pit,' Arista explained.

'Told you,' Mari said with a smile."

Keep up the good work!