the story is simple and routine. there is nothing new in it. the candy land is the only thing that filled in some hope and created some interest. well, i am not a kid and that may be the reason that i am praise the story so much. but i can surely say that small children who read your story will surely find it exiting.
well it is a good time passer and i am sure that you can write good sequels to this one.
as far as the story is concerned it is O.K. it is a clear and simple one.
well you could have included some more interesting things and for that you need to boost your imagination.
read my story: the spell and the prophecy (1920196) and give your valuable feed back.
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