Interesting style of writing. But I think that you are misleading people with the genre. Unless you have a different interpretation of Action/Adventure. This is more scientific than supernatural. I'm not sure what to say about mystery. Also, I'm a religious man and all, but what significance does it bring to this story. Were you attempting to blend Science and Religion or something? If that's the case you should sneak religion in their a little better.
Half of this story is describing the lodge that you or your character is in. I mean that's not a bad thing but I'm forgetting about the main character. Also I have to tell you, although I not a romantic guy and I'm not a fan of this story, but writing style seems great. I'm not a fan of your writing style either, but it just seems complete, which has gave me a larger drive to perfect mine. Thanks.
That sounds peaceful, being in the sea away from everyone all alone. I clicked on this because it said religious, but God made my heart cold and expect me to overcome that despite being raised around hateful sinful people. At the end I was confused, was the person in the boat going towards the other boat or what? Because how can that jerk boat keep moving when their is a anchor keeping it in one place.
Well I was expecting more out of this, but it did point out some stuff I haven't quite thought of. Funny thing is, I don't usually complement a writers piece, I just give them what I thought needs improvement. Probably because I toss my work in the dirt, stamp and spit on it until it's paper heart grows cold. But I'll consider this.
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