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Review by Damian
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I like enough to say that its too short for a post. This is more of an ad than a story, not saying its bad. What I'm saying is, I liked it, but I have to read more to like it to a full potential. Get more into the story of Kay. Who is Kay? What did he do for a living? Do some back story. Tell your audience a day in the life of Kay, and then make the story pop open! looks like a gr8 read and y'know what? I'll be more than glad to help if u want! I've been writing for 6 years now since I was at least 11 years old and I am attending a literary club at my college. You know me already though don't you? I'm the guy who owns the campfire! Lol. 5 stars to getcha started though! ;D

Catcha l8r,
. riolu17
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Review by Damian
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Ooh... Me want more!
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