I absolutely love this poem. It is soooooo good. I love the way it's written and I love the meaning. I think it is so sweet that it is written from the child's point of view. Some many families actually make this wish on Christmas and it is the perfect time of year to write something like this. Overall, it was written very well and I would love to read more from you.
I really enjoyed reading this poem. I thought it was written very well and it flowed good. Also the rhyming was executed really good. I liked the meaning of the poem too. It was very short and sweet and it had a cute feel to it. Overall, I think it was a good poem. Keep writing!
I really like this poem. It was written very well and the details are good. I also thought it flowed very well and it had a good beat even though it didn't have a set rhyme scheme. I actually prefer poems like this rather than poems with a rhyme scheme. I feel that they get a bit "corny" if you know what I mean. Overall, well done, keep writing!
Very good. I think this poem was written very well and I like the meaning of it. The rhyme scheme was executed very good and it flowed very well. The only advice I can think to give you would be to take some of the commas out after each line. Some of them are not needed. Keep Writing!
Wow. I think this is fantastic! My best friend and I were on the verge of tears. It really captured my attention and my eyes were glued to the screen. It is so horrible that you had to go through this, but you made created something beautiful out of it. Truly amazing.
I really liked this poiem. I thought it was very well written and it captured my attention entirely. I really like the last line, " My heart died with her". It's very dramatic in a sad way. I enjoy reading things of this nature so I thought it ws especially good. Keep writing!
I thought this poem was very cute. I liked the way it was written. I love poems like this because they are all so sweet. It made me think of a special person to whom I could relate this poem to. I love poems that I can have a connection with in the real world.
I absolutely love this poem. Maybe it's because I'm a total sucker for love poems but I thought this was great. Sometimes, I feel that some poems that rhyme are a bit corny, but I think you wrote this very well. Keep writing!
I don't particularly like this poem. It was okay, but it didn't seem to be very well written. I think you had a good idea but I don't think the execution was well portrayed. Perhaps, if the poem was better revised it could have been written better. Overall, it was not the best poem, but it was certainly not the worst. It has tremendous potential so keep writing and practicing because I feel that you could be a great writer.
I really like this poem. It's very interesting. I like the details and imagery through out the poem. It really captured my attention. I don't get why you numbered the lines though. I felt it was a bit unneccesary to do that. Overall, I really liked this poem. Keep writing!
I really like this story, but I would really like to know why Leslie was so confused by the content of the paper given to her by Gracey.I'm curious as to what was on the paper. Also, I would like to know the task that Leslie has to do for the old woman. Overall, it was a really good story. Keep Writing!
I think this was great. It really captured my attention. It had great imagery and details throughout the story. I can't imagine the way you felt during those few days while she was in recovery. I know you must have loved her very much to stay by her side through all of that. Keep writing!
I really liked this poem. It made me think of Halloween. I could picture all the creatures you desciribed in the poem. This is the perfect poem for Halloween. I wouldn't change anything about it. The use of imagery and detail was really good. Keep writing!
I think this was very good. The idea of the story was well executed. Next time, use more details and imagery. I think it would make it a better story. The more details you use, the better the story becomes. So try using more deatils and more imagery. It will make you a better writer.
I thought this poem was really good. Some parts were a little confusing but overall it was a good poem. It was actually a bit strange, but in a good way. lol. Where did you get your inspiration from? It seems like a gothic style poem. It's also kind of spooky.
The overall idea of the story was good, but it wasn't executed as hell as i would have liked it to be. Some of the wording didn't make sense and their quite a few gramatical errors.The story woud havebeen much better if you had used more imagery and more detail. Overall the story was ok but it needs to be revised more closely.
I love this story. It's very sad but it's amazing the way it's written. It's a great story and the details are really good. I could feel the pain expressed in the story. I can't imagine watching one of my parents die like that. This story is really good. Keep writing!
I really like this poem. I liked the details alot. It kinda reminds me of a Halloween story, in a way. I'd actually like to know where you get some of your inspiration from. Whenever I have to write something for class, I can never think of what to write or where to get some inspiration from. Overall, it was a pretty good poem. Keep writing!
I thought your poem was very good. I liked how it was a tragic love story. Maybe next time, try to use word to keep the readers captivated. Overall, it was very good.
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