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Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
You jump around quite a bit. You don’t finish your thoughts before moving on and there’s not very much detail. You say your name. The time of year, your favorite holiday. You talk about expectations from neighbors, then a car accident and back to the haunted house. It doesn’t flow and needs details. You mentioned how you decorate specific areas out of nowhere but don’t give much detail about the whole picture. Then you jump to learning something irrelevant to the previous paragraph the next day.
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