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Review by Sallyrhobson
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi! This is a really cool piece. It's like horror and humor had a baby. You develop both sides well. The only thing I would really do would be to balance the story out. You spend a large chunk talking about your mom and setting up the story but I feel as if you could spend more time developing the actual story part and make it a little more detailed and complex. You do a really awesome job with this prompt, though!
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