SO hauntingly "raw' and beautiful! I could "feel " the anger in the words; the pain in your heart; the senseless act. Keep writing with the pain/passion of your heart as it's the best muse you'll ever have!
I really enjoyed this! I want to read more; you have a very good way of revealing the "emotional" side of your characters without telling the reader! I read this so fast (because I wanted to know what happened next!) and kept going back to re-read portions. The scene it very "real"! I loved the mystery of it; the underlying secrets - which makes me want to know more and keep reading. There were minor sentence structure and needs a tad editing (for my taste) - but I really, really enjoyed this. I've added you to my favorites so I can read more of your work without having to search around. Is there more posted on these characters; have far along are you with the book? Please finish it! I read a lot of gay-themed suspense/mystery/fiction novels and think this work shows great promise!
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