We all are on a journey to an end that was mapped out a long time ago by someone much higher than we can ever be on this plane. The journey is all we have, and who we touch along the way.
I wrote a piece for a contest that put our souls in these bodies as a punishment for past sins. You will have to admit that there's only one way out, but I'm sure when our time is done we move on to a better place.
I liked your work. It makes one think.
A blow job is a very personal thing for a man. In fact many women use it to control their men. I liked what you wrote. Please expand on it, and let your readers know how you are feeling down deep in your soul, about giving that kind of enjoyment to another.
I want to know how it gives you pleasure to take his hardness in your mouth.
Keep up the good work.
That was powerful! Isn't it nice to be swept away in passion? Our whole world works primarily on passion anyway, and we all get caught in it's trap everyday.
You expressed yourself well in this piece. If you really did give in, you both experienced a healing of sorts. Can that be all bad?
Very interesting, and erotic at the same time. Most poetry opens up the mind of the reader for further thought, and yours does that as well.
Keep up the good work.
I like the poem, however I don't know if I could dance to it. It does have a nice beat. There's nothing like slappin hides to brighten up the evening, or any time of day.
This was a little base, but sex can be fun without the flowers and wine as well.
Keep up the good work.
Very thoughtful. So many times each day we have a chance to elevate all of humanity with merely what we ourselves do and say. The power of our words is mighty, and should be used with great care lest we create something really bad.
Please take a few minutes to read my piece called "ripples". I think you'll like it.
Keep up the good work.
scifib
A very interesting piece. The story of love found, and love lost all in cyberspace. It's a new modern world after all. My thoughts are have fun, and let it all happen naturally. That way it's more fun because it sneaks up on you. Kepp writing, you're doing good
Very nicely written, and very deep. I will have to read it more than once to understand it's meaning. I'm guessing that you are a very introspective person with deep thoughts. I also feel that you are a lonely person that is searching for something or someone. The switch back and forth from boy to woman is a search for identity. This identity is not necessiarly sexual, but a search for a carefree lifestyle as opposed to a lonely one.
Keep searching, but don't try to hard. Sometimes the most valuable lessons come to us when we least expect them. Good luck.
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