For starters, this was a poem that left me shocked and speechless.
Very passionate and dark with creeping words and unexpected twists. Wonderful!
I found no errors in punctuation, spelling, or grammar. Although there were a few bits in the poem that were off in meter that made it uncomfortable while reading, other than that, I enjoyed it thoroughly. Write On!
Wow, brilliant!
My first thoughts were: How incredibly funny, witty, and very down-to-earth.
The story flowed easily and the passages were smoothly written. I enjoyed how you repeated the phrase once at the beginning and once at the end... Great job!
So very true.
Being a sort-of "up and growing" student yet, I can see the reason through your eyes clearly... And I agree.
Your strong reasoning and smooth outline of the idea throughout the piece was simply and to-the-point.
Well done!
Great wordsearch!
I just thought that it might've been a bit too simple, since all the words were basically all next to each other.
Nevertheless, it was still a remarkably fun and wonderful thing to do.
Great job putting it together!
Awesome piece!
It was well-written and made me wonder after I was finished. You words seemed to be picked out very well and were pieced together in a fashion that made reading it straightfoward and smooth. I liked how you created many images in my mind when your "point" moved on your plane of life. I found no errors or mistakes in spelling, punctuation, or grammar. Well done!
A funny, memorable poem about Back-to-School!
I loved how you started out with the seventh grader feeling that he/she should feel like others will judge him/her when she/he should really be himself/herself. Judging yourself by taking others opinions is something that goes on at school frequently, and I'm glad that you brought that out in the spotlight in this piece, too.
I found no errors or mistakes whatsoever. Wonderful!
Wow, absolutely passionate and breathtaking.
I sat, thinking over this story over and over... The details, the actions, and the overall outcome of Marge, the grandfather, and Daryl. It took me about ten minutes to finally write this review. You have an outstanding way with storytelling and piecing together the plot and making memorable characters. I especially enjoyed how you didn't use past tense, but present. Well done, well written.
I found no errors or mistakes in your spelling, grammar, or punctuation...
You truly did an amazing job!
Haha, quite a memorable parody indeed!
The first few lines captured me immediately into the piece, which brought a few laughs and humor, I have to admit.
Your rhyming and the meter were almost perfect throughout the entire song, giving it an even timing throughout. I spotted no errors or mistakes in punctuation or spelling... All in all, it was wonderful.
Write On!
A very short, sweet poem.
It reminds me of something I would write.
Your rhyming was done fairly well, but some of your verses
had the meter a little unbalanced. If you want, you can go back and change verses two, three, and five to make them more stable. All in all, you did quite well.
Write On!
Ah, politicians.
Your poem expressed your view on them very well.
The point of how politicians and what they will do to win, as well as what they do, is well thought out. Well written. The spin on words and the adjectives were perfect. I found no errors or mistakes in punctuation or spelling.
Terrific job!
Wow, I really enjoyed this poem!
The details and feeling of being trapped and experiencing pain is very clear.
The adjectives used throughout to describe the scene are fabulous. The ending was a nice wrap-up, and it worked very well.
I found no mistakes or errors, nor anything you should change.
Well done!
Welcome to Writing.Com!
I hope you enjoy it here; it's a wonderful community.
First off, I'd like to say that I loved this poem.
Each line had a strong meaning, and ironically,
it kind of does remind me of how I feel when I
write poetry. The words flowed smoothly, so that
the reader is eager to continue.
I found no errors, save in Line 11, you might want
to put a space in between 'me' and 'to.'
I almost thought you mispelled 'metro' for a second.
And except for that, great poem!
Wow, breathtaking.
I found your poem amazing with just the right
words, just the fitting light. I loved it. Just
simple as that. I didn't find any errors or flaws.
Great job!
You've written a lovely piece here.
The words linked themselves to make a vivid,
soothing scene. Gorgeous.
Each stanzas were flawless, save a few
punctuation errors. Here are my suggestions:
on a midsummers day.
Perhaps you could change it to 'midsummer's', saying that it's describing the day.
You have a couple more of these errors that I'll list below.
in winters chilly cast.
It should be changed to 'winter's'.
on springs warmest day.
This should be 'spring's'.
form our favorite day's
Now this one is just the opposite.
In my opinion, the apostrophe should
be removed, since it isn't possesive
or being used as an adjective.
I have to say, this is one of the most touching poems I've ever read. Beautifully genius.
The three stanzas about the three photos depict lovely descriptions and very vivid detail. That's what I love about poetry; it's way to capture your
heart and the moments.
I didn't find any flaws or errors.
Fantastic job! This tribute was perfectly wonderful to read.
In fact, it reminds me of my own poem, 'Grandma's Quilt'. If you ever have the time, please take a look.
I have to say that this is also another great poem you've cooked up here. As in your last poem, this flowed smoothly in most parts, had a fairly nice structure in some stanzas, and carried a simple, yet strong character in wording. I did, although, find some simple flaws. In some particular stanzas, I found it uncomfortable to read because the free-verse just didn't fit what was going on. I can't place my finger on which ones, but they repeated often in the longer ones. Overall, you did pretty well.
Amazing piece of poetry you've got here.
Strong lines with strong wording is definitely a fantastic sign that you're on your way. I enjoyed the way the words flowed nicely and how the description and center of the poem was polished in nicely.
All in all, beyond calling gorgeous.
RAOK is such a sweet community group.
Nowadays, I see so many blooming writers that are excited or pleased to have received an immediate upgrade from RAOK. Just wanted to thank this whole group for the dedicated work they're provided for the evergrowing WDC. Keep up the magnificent work!
My first impressions of this poem were 'Wow'.
It's a very strong piece with amazingly strong
words. Lots of meaning, feeling, and emotion
packed in to make it very emotional and remarkable.
Fabulous job! Keep it up!
I thought you did a wonderful job on this poem.
You had very strong points, such as descriptive
words, good format, and a nice feeling all around it. That was a brilliant thing to see as the reader. But one thing I have to mention, it is totally my own opinion though, is how the rhymings seemed to be just a tiny bit off during stanzas. It was a little uncomfortable, but likewise, okay. Other than that, good job!
This is amazing.
I loved how the poem is so simple, yet so meaningful. It touches my heart... It really does. The words in each stanza have so much feeling packed in; It's almost indescribable. Superb job!
Bouncin' back here again!
I might stay a while and take a thorough look through your port!
Talk about the topic of love.
We've all been through this type of
issue at least once during our lifetimes.
I can totally relate to this. For one,
I enjoyed how your words pack a lot meaning
into the poem. The whole thing basically revolves
around the topic of breakup and denial and that's
what really grabbed me. The simplicity, even,
shows so much in so little.
Great job!
Personally, I'm one of those people who
aren't too personalized into one category
of reads. You have a fantastic bundle of
poetry here! I've read through most and
not all are bad I have to say... Not too bad.
You've got a lot of room for more, so keep
up the awesome work!
Cheers! Write On!
-Tigerlily
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/scribblez63/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/3
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.23 seconds at 1:50am on May 19, 2024 via server web1.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
