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Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Mr. Varma wants to build an apartment building on haunted land.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. Mr. Varma grew a lot from the start to the end.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person limited. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

Good use of dialogue to drive the story.



*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

The descriptions were enough to set the scenes in my mind. I might suggest a few stragetic sentences that tap into smell and taste to heighten the fright.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting near a rural setting?

This is something that is clarified for the story.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Mr. Varna
There's enough here to understand his motivations. He's the character most affected by the ghosts and he's the one who goes through the most change. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a period after the first sentence: "When the wind wailed."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Great ending! The story built the mystery well. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Ben is at a cabin retreat to catch up on his writing, but a blizzard strikes.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the opening. Good, solid descriptions really put me in the moment.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by Ben. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There is some dialogue which accents the narration.

MY SUGGESTION: I pointed casually toward the living room. "It's over there, you know."

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

Nice use of the five scenes to heighten Ben's fright. I especially liked: "The blizzard raged to a screaming wail that made me gasp in surprise."

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: rural setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Ben
There's enough here to understand his motivations. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Great ending! The story built the suspense and mystery well. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Sheriff O'Leary buckles down and goes on the hunt to find the Bardstown Bus.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Great ending! Founder's Day is still going on strong.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscent. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

Good descriptions considering the 21 sentence limitation!

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Sheriff O'Leary

O'Leary is a hero as he hunts down the bus. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader into the story. I counted 23 sentences and saw the story was edited on 1 OCT which did not meet the rules for the Cop Shop Contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review of Cop Shop Mystery  
Review by StephBee
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Ralph got lost driving the Bardstown Bus.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Great ending! The Band got to where they were going.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscent. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

Good descriptions considering the 21 sentence limitation!

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Ralph

Ralph gets distracted and causes a fuss. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader into the story. Sentence count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Cop Shop contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review of Left in the Dust  
Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Sheriff O'Leary is on the hunt to find the missing Bardstown Bus.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

Great visuals! I could see Smith doing the NASCAR driver thing.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscent. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

Good descriptions considering the 21 sentence limitation!

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Sheriff O'Leary

You can't keep a good, determined man down! *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader into the story. Sentence count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Cop Shop contest.

Glowing Steph
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Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Mr. Brewers is determined to prove Dr. Whoa-ha's a fraud.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. Nice turn of the tables.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by Mr. Brewers. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags were used appropriately. The dialogue drives the narration.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes, but this is something that could be expanded on. I might suggest tapping into the 5 senses. I would really love to know what the train smelled like.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: industrial age
PLACE: Train

This is something that is clarified enough for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Mr. Brewers

His motivation becomes apparent toward the end. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader. The story captured the essence of a steampunk story. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph

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Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE CNOTES

*Reading* I visited Puppet Master's C-Note Emporium.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the nature theme. My favorite notes where the Dolphins and the Lighthouse.

*Star* ENGAGING

All the Notes were heartwarming. I liked the focus on nature.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a nice variety of cnotes. They were uplifting, inspirational, and positive.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might expand the introduction a bit more.
Overall, nice presentation. I like that notes were affordable.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall July 2021 Cnote Contest.
Glowing Steph
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Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE CNOTES

*Reading* I visited Lilli's All Occasion C-Notes.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the whismical feel to the notes. My favorites were the flowers and the fingers.

*Star* ENGAGING

All the Notes were heartwarming.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a nice variety of cnotes. They were uplifting, inspirational, and positive.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

Good introduction.
Overall, nice presentation. I like that notes were affordable.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall July 2021 Cnote Contest.
Glowing Steph
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Review of Dragon Daughter  
Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

Dragon Daughter engages the reader using poetry and topical conversations.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I liked the poems. They were succicent and engaging. I especially liked the line in Golden Sin: "Sour wine fills that chalice."

*Star* ENGAGING

The blog invites the reader to engage. I posted several times on topics.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a variety of posts. I liked the post about recycling. Very comprehensive.

*Star*EXPRESSIVE

The blog was easy to read. There was a nice conversational tone to the posts.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes, but then when it comes to reviewing blogs, I'm a bit more liberal.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

Nice graphic in the intro to set the mood/tone of the blog. I enjoyed visiting your blog for the Bard's Hall 2021 Blogging Contest. *Smile*

Glowing Steph
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Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

Connecting with Jeannie engages the reader discussing life, family and topical political conversations.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the author was candid and heartfelt with every post.

*Star* ENGAGING

The blog invites the reader to engage. I posted several times on topics.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a variety of posts. Some were about life, family and others discussed the "hot topics" of today.

*Star*EXPRESSIVE

The blog was easy to read. There was a nice, conversational style.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes, but then when it comes to reviewing blogs, I'm a bit more liberal.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set a tone/mood for your blog. I might also suggest incorporating more graphics, (I did like the one with the bird) and links for a visual appeal. I enjoyed visiting your blog for the Bard's Hall 2021 Blogging Contest. *Smile*

Reviewed by StephB
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Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

Day to Day Happenings in my Life engages the reader by touching on life as it's passing by and topical conversations.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I liked the length of the entries. They were just the right size. Not too long, not short, and always left me with nugget.

*Star* ENGAGING

The blog invites the reader to engage. I posted several times on topics.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a variety of posts. They discussed life, family, and topics of the day.

*Star*EXPRESSIVE

The blog was easy to read. I liked the conversational tone.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes, but then when it comes to reviewing blogs, I'm a bit more liberal.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set a tone/mood for your blog. I might also suggest incorporating more graphics, and links for a visual appeal. I enjoyed visiting your blog for the 2021 Bard's Hall Blogging Contest. *Smile*

Reviewed by StephB
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Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

Spiral Bound Jounal is a blog that features fictional writing.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I liked the creativity in the entries.

*Star* ENGAGING

The blog invites the reader to dive and discover the characters.

*Star*VARIETY

There was a variety of posts, including topical themes and how today's world looks at them.

*Star*EXPRESSIVE

The blog was easy to read.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes, but then when it comes to reviewing blogs, I'm a bit more liberal. I especially liked how each entry was uniquely presented using WDC ML.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set a tone/mood for your blog. I enjoyed visiting your blog. *Smile*

Reviewed by StephB for the 2021 Bard's Hall Blogging Contest.
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Review of Matters of Heart  
Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Lady Elizabeth hires a physical therapist to help her with her spinal problem.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I thought the story offered a nice twist with the heroine being a physical therapist. It's not something I usually see with the genre. I thought the hero was spot on!

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person limited by Ann. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. I might suggest a minor edit for dialogue tags. Only use "he said or she said" to identify the speaker. Use an "action" tag when speaking. For example, as written: "Thank you with the arrangements," he said warmly, taking her hand. A wave of joy washed over her.

My suggestion: "Thank you with the arrangements." Clayton wrapped his warm hand around Ann's. Her heart raced.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes, but this is something that could be expanded on. I might suggest tapping into the 5 senses, smell and touch to put the reader into the scene. The use of flowers and meaning would do well here.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: the past
PLACE: England

This is something that could be a tad more clarified for the reader. Is it the Regency period or perhaps the Victorican era?

*Star* CHARACTERS

Ann

There's enough here to understand her motivations. She's very warmhearted and giving, perfect traits for her line of work. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mentioned above. My other suggestion concerns voice. "Liz" is a much more modern way to say "Elizabeth," and it was slightly jaring for me as a reader, as it would take me out of the time period. I might suggest using "Elizabeth," or "Beth," but after Lady Elizabeth gave permission. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

Glowing Steph

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Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo displays a sunset over water.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the picture, tapping into hidden stories/people and inspiring the reader to remember them.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the picture evokes memories of the past.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which does not follow a 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I would suggest tightening up the poem to reflect a 5-7-5 traditional syllable pattern of a haiku. I love how the picture and poem compliment each other and inspire the reader to go deeper into the meaning. The poem/picture evoke a sense of peace. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

Reviewed by StephB
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Review of Antheraea  
Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo is a moth against a ruler.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the disturbing picture, as it explains how the moth got there and evokes the immediate feelings of the viewer.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

This picture invoked an instant reaction from me. "eewww." It's a very powerful picture that says "look at me."

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which follows the 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The picture grabs your attention and the poem adds depth. Well done. The poem/picture evokes emotional disgust and well, I think we'd all be freaked out seeing that moth. I also like how the title, which is strange, (it's the name of the moth) plays right into the dynamic of the picture and poem. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

Reviewed by StephB
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Review of Fyn Wave  
Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo shows a whole showing off it's flipper.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the playful picture, evoking a sense of reverence and respect as the whale says "hello."

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The concept and the lighthearted word play. I enjoyed the sense of awe the author invoked with the words.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which follows the 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. I love how the picture and poem compliment each other. The poem/picture evoke good vibes with a lighthearted beat. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

Reviewed by StephB
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Review of Jumping Dolphins  
Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo is a playful one, showing dolphins jumping out of the water.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the picture. It's nice to see the dolphins enjoying themselves and bringing happiness to others.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The photo is very vibrant and expressive.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which follows the 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I like the picture, but I would would like to see the poem do more than describe what the dolphins are doing, maybe tap into the emotional response of the picture such as fun, vibrant, playful. The poem/picture evoke good feelings. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

Reviewed by StephB
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Review of Leaving  
Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

The photo highlights a sunflower surrounded by autumn foliage.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a perfect compliment to the autumn picture, as old becomes new giving into what nature wants.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The concept. Nice word play about old and new.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which follows the 5-7-5 syllable pattern.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. I love how the picture and poem compliment each other and inspire the reader to go deeper into the meaning. The poem/picture make the reader think about nature's cycle, and even deeper, our own. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

Reviewed by StephB
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Review of PINK AND BLUE  
Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*PaintBrush* THE PHOTO

This is a nature photo taken "upward" to reveal the skies. Trees are witnessing the sunset.

*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is a nice compliment to the picture. As nature bares witness to God's work.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoy nature photos and I liked how this one tied into God's wonderful work on Earth.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku which does not follow the 5-7-5 syllable pattern. The pattern here is 5-10-6.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

My only suggestion is to work on the 5-7-5 syllable scheme. The poem/picture evoke a feeling of wonder. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest!

Reviewed by StephB
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Review of Once More Now  
Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Dylan and his invisible friend make pub night interesting.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked what happened to Annie. Poor thing. It made me chuckle.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omnicient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

This was a dialogue challenge so the dialogue drives the story. The dialogue is conversational and engages the reader.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

It's hard to fit descriptions into dialogue, so I would say good use of trageted sentences to dribble in the description of the Pub

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting, Irish Pub

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Annie, Dylan, Unnamed friend

There's enough here to understand all their motivations. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/puncutation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader. This was a challenging contest and the author did a great job with it. The dialogue felt natural to the Irish and there was a solid story that weaved in Irish lore. I like how the unnamed friend was implied to be a Leprechaun. It made me think as a reader. I had to read it a second time to make sure I didn't miss anything. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

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Review by StephBee
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

THREE SCORE AND TEN
The blog was active SEP-DEC 2020. The blog focused on biographical entries.

*Smile*ORIGINALITY

Each day was something new and I liked reading about Luna and Biscuit.

*Star* ORGANIZATION

The blog was very organized and it was easy to find the entries.

*Star*GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I didn't spot any real isuses. I liked how the entries took on a conversational tone.

*Star*CONTENT/CLARITY/FOCUS

The blog had nice focus on biographical content. All the blog entries I reviewed were spot on - not too little, not too much.

*Star*VARIETY

Discussions were varied and well thought out. The theme of the blog, "biographical" tied all posts together.

*Star* ACTIVITY

Posts were hit and miss. Some had good engagement, some had none. I would have liked to have seen only because it was an interesting. *Smile*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The introduction frames the theme of the blog well so you know what to expect.

This Blog is nominated for a 2020 Quill Award. Good luck in the Contest!

Reviewed by StephB for the 2020 Quills

Glowing Steph

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for entry "Coffee and Philosophy" 
Review by StephBee
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

WRITINGS IN THE SAND
The blog was active about 6 months out of the year in 2020. The blog focused on personal/entertainment type musings from the author. Any posts having to do with Coffee *CoffeeBl* was a big hit with me.

*Smile*ORIGINALITY

I liked the every day musings. It allowed readers to connect to the blog.

*Star* ORGANIZATION

The blog was very organized and it was easy to find the entries.

*Star*GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I didn't spot any real isuses. I liked how the entries took on a conversational tone.

*Star*CONTENT/CLARITY/FOCUS

The blog had nice focus on personal, whimsical thoughts. The content on all the blog entries I reviewed was spot on - not too little, not too much.

*Star*VARIETY

Discussions were varied and well thought out. The theme of the blog, "emotional/personal" tied all posts together.

*Star* ACTIVITY

There was good engagment on the posts. *Smile*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The introduction establishes a theme, but I might suggest using a graphic to lure more readers in.

This Blog is nominated for a 2020 Quill Award. Good luck in the Contest!

Reviewed by StephB for the 2020 Quills

Glowing Steph

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Review of Complex Numbers  
for entry "Got Muffin" 
Review by StephBee
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

COMPLEX NUMBERS
The blog was active every month in 2020. The blog focused on a WDC prompt, "30 Day Blogging Challenge."

*Smile*ORIGINALITY

The replies to the prompts were very oringal and well thought out. I like the use of videos to frame some of the posts.

*Star* ORGANIZATION

The blog was very organized and it was easy to find the entries.

*Star*GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I didn't spot any real isuses. I liked how the mechanics made the blog easy to read, and I like how the tone took on a conversational tone.

*Star*CONTENT/CLARITY/FOCUS

The blog had nice focus on the "30 Day Blogging Challenge." The content on all the blog entries I reviewed was spot on - not too little, not too much.

*Star*VARIETY

In regards to the prompt content, Discussions were varied and well thought out. The theme of the blog, "personal" tied all posts together.

*Star* ACTIVITY

There was good engagment on the posts. *Smile*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The introduction gives a shout to complex numbers and highlights the Merit Badges the blog has earned.

This Blog is nominated for a 2020 Quill Award. Good luck in the Contest!

Reviewed by StephB for the 2020 Quills

Glowing Steph

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for entry "Psalm 3:1-3, 8" 
Review by StephBee
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE BLOG

THESE ARE MY JOT-TINGS PART 2
The blog was active all of 2020. The blog used WDC prompts, for example, ""Rhythm and Rhyme Challenge."

*Smile*ORIGINALITY

The replies to the prompts were very orginal and well thought out. I also liked how the author used different poetry forms from hiakus to sonnets.

*Star* ORGANIZATION

The blog was very organized and it was easy to find the entries.

*Star*GRAMMAR/SPELLING

I didn't spot any real isuses. Good use of WDC ML.

*Star*CONTENT/CLARITY/FOCUS

The blog had a fantastic focus on poetry. The content on all the blog entries I reviewed was spot on - not too little, not too much. I also liked their was a spiritual theme throughout. On several of the hiakus, I appreciated the nature theme.

*Star*VARIETY

In regards to the variety content, what I liked was the various forms of poetry the author used.

*Star*PARTING ACTIVITY

There wasn't as much activity/engagement which was a bit of bummer because the poetry was well written and engaging. *Smile*

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The introduction was engaging. Good use of graphics, WDC ML and inspirational quotes.

This Blog is nominated for a 2020 Quill Award. Good luck in the Contest!

Reviewed by StephB for the 2020 Quills

Glowing Steph

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Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: 18+ | (1.5)
*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2021. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

*PointRight* Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!
*PointRight* Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!
*PointRight* Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.
*PointRight*This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2021! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.
*PointRight* Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

*PointRight* A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

*Reading* THE POEM

Something happened to Cupid's bow so now it causes decay and darkness.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: UGLY. Cupid's good intentions have caused toxicity, decay, darkness and damning the lovers to hell and purgatory. That's rough.



*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem that doesn't have a rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

While intentionally bad, Cupid's slam seems to come off a bit misdirected at the couple and not on him.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2021 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.
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