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Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a different form of poetry mixed with a prose. Part of it does appeared to as in Acrostic form but most of it composed as prose/poetry combination.It has captured the Christmas spirit with religous as well as community reflections. The scriptures ' use is well placed.
A good read,
Jaya H.
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Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A different format to present a poem. It looks like paragraphs, rather than stanzas. The poem displays spring season. it has picked up all specialities of spring-colors, blooms, buds etc. but why call some trees in winter's shame? No season can be shameful, it is a rhythm of a life, I think.
Jaya H,

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Review by jaya h
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
The unspoken voices of a war are well documented in this poem. A flow is good with good choice of words. I liked the end:
You cannot help…
hide the faces
end the screams
stir the silence
but you do.

All the feelings stated here are true and very realistic.
A good read,
Jaya H.


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Review of A Fruit to Bear  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
An unusual style used in this poem. Is it a way to make a stement here. The message is clear in these few lines but the expression is presented little too loud. Those words in capital letters break the rhythm of the poem, I think. For sa man to enjoy fruits of his labor, his actions need to be persistent for sure.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of Something  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It sounds like a wordplay. Not sure what to call its theme is? Tje confusion in the mind is clearly stated in the poem. The honest thought processed expressed her is well put. But there is no change from the first line to the last. It doesn't move anywhere.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of For the Teens  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A typical teenager 's reaction is displayed in this poem. For them everything is urgent and expectations are ver high with lack of patience. They never just enjoy the time, it has to be lalelled. Impulsive reactions are common for them and not to listen to any other argument is vey typical.
A good read,
jaya H.

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Review of a dream  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A bad dream pushes the panic button in this poem.
There are lot of spelling errors, need to pay attention to the grammar when edit it next.The emotional song is done well. The flow is good, it seems more like aprose than the poem. The feelings expressed well, even if its displayed as a dream the emotions are very real so is the pain.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review by jaya h
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This a fiction can happened in reality. The unusual request from a woman at the tinsel town street is worth rethinkong about. The thought process goes into the mind was expressed very realistically and the situation handled with a smart thinking. The story flows well, plot is good and is developed cleverly.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of Life's Gamble  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
THe poem talks about the life as a gamble. It's hard to make a right choice every time and sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn't. With noone to guide, it's a sole responsibility which makes one either pay the price or enjoy the pleasures. It's always good to keep one's goal inlife well thought of and then proceed .
Jaya H.


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Review of A change  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Another broken relationship displayed in the poem. The painful experiences are documented with emotions and the readiness of mending the differences is exprssed well. The heartache and loss is all over the poem and reader feels the pain in the lines written,
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of Colors  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It's an unusual response to a kiss. The colorful feelings are expressed well with each color representing an unique feeling. It's an experience narrated here in the poem. The idea is differentand it displayed well. There is no rhythm or rhyme but the poem reads well.
Jaya H.

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Review of God  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a prose with poetic twist in between. The god , creator, caretaker and supporter to all human beings who believe in him.
Without him the world doesn't exist, he is everywhere and in everything. The poem /prose composed well, flow is good and honoringthe God is done well.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of Through the Storm  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
What a dream!
The story moves fast like a twister and until the end a reader didn't even suspectt that it could be a dream. The suspense is well kept. The plot is well developed till the end. The love for the animals is displayed very cleverly. The balance of the story is narrated good.
A good read,
Jaya H.
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Review of Decaying Beauty  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
The colorful Autumn well painted . But I didn't like the' decaying beauty' part of it. I feel like it is surrendering rather than deacying. A good flow with apt words of choice.
These are my favorite lines:

A tapestry is formed in the dying.
In the decaying is beauty’s domain.

Though I have trouble with the word decaying.
A good read,
Jaya h.
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Review of I Miss Buttons  
Review by jaya h
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
It's an emotional fiction narrated well. Any loss is traumatic and to get over it can be very difficult. Especially when there is unexpected death of a loved one. For children their pets-friends are very special and a sorrow of a loss is unbearable when the reason of the death is not clear. to subside the loss of a pet , getting another one is the best medicine , that is whathappens in this fiction and it confirms as the best medicine.
Jaya H.
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Review of Disease Spreads.  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Itis an epidemic well described. It starts with a one patient and then it slowly but surely invades the community, sometimes it's fatal and causes the health hazard.
It can invade body and mind until they both get wasted, but to stay out of such epidemic couldbe difficult but possible. Though the poem doesn't discuss thosse possibilities.
A good read,
Jaya H.
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Review by jaya h
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (4.0)
An invitation for a good time is extended in this poem. It's composed in simple form, more like a prose with no rhyme or rhythm but it has sweetness and the invitation is very graceful as well as tempting. The flow is good and invitation is sweet and earnest. The reader wants to give it a try for sure.
A good read,
Jaya H.


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Review by jaya h
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
A nice prayer-like poem composed with humility and love.Until the last line a reader doesn't know that it's being said in sleep/dream. A surprise twist make the poem more interesting. I liked the flow and choice of the words here. A monologue with the god is very touching.
A good read,
Jaya H.
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Review of Roses in Heaven  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A very emotional tribute to the Mother on Mother's day. The beginning is very good. I liked the feelings expressed in those lines. It's like a prayer, with not knowing whether wit will be answered or not. The longing to meet mom again, to laugh with her, is well expressed.
A good read,
Jaya H.
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Review of Room at the End  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
The poem says it talks about Alzeimer and trying to fit the quotation or its meaning. That's not achieved but the poem is sensitive in many ways about memory loss and catching the glimses of the past. Itt needs little editing to maintain the flow and make the thought process well-documented.
A good read,
Jaya H.
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Review of Gazing  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A perfect title for the poem. A well written poem, in the form which seems a little complex to follow. A nice setup for snow gliding or glazing. With the picture, the atmosphere is created just right.I liked the following lines the most:
Nature envelopes us, void of cares in this world.
We're alone, our senses gazing.

a good read,
Jaya h.
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Review of Someone Else  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
The poem talks about two scenarios. Both try to send the messages of love to get the response from the other. The characters are realastic and scenes are familiar, caught in three stanzas. the flow is good with god choice of words. There are losers in both scenes, so what is lacking here?


A good read,
Jaya H.


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Review of The Autumn Leaf  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
The emotions, pains of loss expressed in this poem. The poem moves very slowly and since there is not much to say, all the stanzas are repeatious and going back and forth with the same vacant thoughts. The comparison to a autumn leaf is not quite true, the metaphore doesn't work .
Jaya H.


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Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
An Intense prayer to the God is created with devotion and faith. wWhen everything fais the God is always the savior. The poem flows well. each stanza shows more and more trust in the God . I think the last stanza is not needed, it doesn't add any more but talkes away some.
A good read,
Jaya H.

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Review of Darkness  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A poem runs well per title. But the though process is not in focus. It seems like a pain expresssed of abandonment. But then it talks as if the end of life is near and one wants to give a good fight for survival. The last line is little awkward.
with little editing, the poem might be better one, Ithink.
Keep writing,
Jaya H.

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