Very sad :( Just for future usage, I'd suggest rhyming in other patterns than abab. Also, only one question mark will do, it will make your writing seem a little more mature, and will belie your age.
It's difficult to rate such a thing, as your opinion on the matter is subjective from person to person (though technically that is what a review is so I contradict myself)
Nonetheless, I like the style. I've often mused the same things so therefore I agree with your conclusion. Why must we always muddle everything?
I love this. I can't offer much help to you but no one minds a good ego stroking now and again. I love just to read it. I enjoy how at first it comes off as earthy and rough, perhaps not the ideal valentine to recieve, but as the poem progresses and is rethought, it's just what one would want to hear, that is, if they're up for the challenge of a non hallmark card.
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