The nighttime was more to his benefit, yet it still hindered his ability to recconnoiter.
Spelling: " reconnoiter "
He was pleased to see the tree nearest him was a very large Oak.
I've noticed you cap words that do not require capitalization. Why is that?
should be " oak ".
All that superb architecture created for the closing line of ;
"Don't move, Runner. Don't you move a muscle."
Uh, . . . the ending does not do the body of this piece any justice. Such fast-paced beginning and building and PFFFTTT - flatline . . .
Would you consider ending this fantastic beginning another way? As it stands, you haven't given the majority of this piece the dues it should have coming.
Were you in a hurry? Time constraints? Word limitations?
In my opinion, the closing does not give your reader much satisfaction after the above-average beginning, or for the most parts!
Should I be missing something that would give me an "Aha! moment" please explain and I'll gladly wipe the egg from my face.
One early summer’s day, I was walking down the road to get whatever the Postman had fashioned for our box, when I came upon a sight I will not soon forget.
No need to cap " postman "
We would swing in that tire out from the edge of the riverbank, and dive into the River during the heat of mid-summer.
No need to cap " river "
I knew today would be special, and Granpa Combs and I were about to share one of his amazing secrets.
Spelling: " Grandpa " - all other spellings of this character is Grandpa, so we should be consistent.
But, when I pulled that sack of apples from behind my back, grinnin’ like a possum with a coon treed,
LOVE THIS REFERENCE - What a hoot, my folks talked like that and they were from Virginny, by crackie!
Short sweet amble down Nostalgia Road - thanks for the trip.
I can't believe that I failed to rate and review this informative, entertaining and God-blessed blog.
You have the gift of explaining whatever it is that day, with clarity, confidence and conviction, your viewpoints and beliefs. I can name on one hand how many people I know that have that same quality.
You also exude the peacemaker's policies of taking a subject and (sometimes you even research it first) building the blocks that will in the end either support or refute your own personal opinion. That, my friend, is C O N F I D E N C E !
You are a keeper!
BTW - This goes to the Public Reviews so other members can get re-acquainted with you again.
What a wonderfully structured commandment complimenting the one God gave us.
#8. Thou shalt not steal.
I cannot refute or rebut one thing you have cataloged in this piece. When I read it the first time, I was surprised to know "the truth" about Forwards and here I read it again as I was guilty of sending a few to someone to cheer them up.
Even with that rationalization, it doesn't change the fact, does it? And I remember sending some to you as well, (**Brain Check, knock off rust and Resume**) knowing you would appreciate their content. Bad SM, bad, bad.
So the importance of the guilty parties to SEE THIS KENZIE ITEM is major.
Could we start a forward Kenzie? JUST THIS ONE TIME? It would educate a mass of humanity and change people's actions.
This goes to the Public Reviews Kenzie, so at least the membership here can have a chance to educate themselves by clicking right here:
The cutest feline concept I've ever read. To be honest, I thought well, I'll start this and probably never finish it because it's a book. I don't have the patience for a book, HOWEVER those seven chapters went by so fast because I have two B&W, male and female, Max & Mollie and I adore the feline personality.
You have captured the nuances of the cat so well, their lounging habits, rubbing, talking etc. You are an excellent student of observation which makes these 7 chapters so delightful.
I dare say that people who never considered a cat just MIGHT after reading this catnip
Pure escapism for cat lovers - I find the FPT part a little far-fetched and a tad confusing but maybe that blends in and out in the succeeding chapters.
The relationship between Mom and Misty is precious - cat fanciers will melt all over your pages
Darn it, I'll have to read the WHOLE thing NOW!
I noticed a bloop at this point: But then he appeared to change his mind as he took two steps away from the water’s rim.
What a glorious time of year for Jews and Christians. As I write this to you we are still in the first day of Passover, 9th.
Full moon in Scorpio
Sacred Passover night.
A vision of Mother Mary
in the diffused silvery light,
she is Semitic, Iraqui, I believe that spelling is, Iraqi
ancient and eternal.
All who are hungry come enter and eat,
opening Seder prayer
We pray for those who are hungry in body
and in spirit.
We cry for universal human equity.
We plead that we may treat each other
tenderly, and not rupture our connections.
By far my favorite portion above.
We seek generational blessings. really feeling this part
Saltwater for life's tears.
I light a single candle.
Dayenu -it is enough for me.
I'm so relieved that I found this item to educate me on what I might encounter.
Unfortunately, it's happened already and I haven't been here a week.
It appears that some authors don't really want honest critiquing.
Emotionalism runs deep and wide, so I'll have to become more savvy about getting my point across without wounding egos.
This piece IS very helpful for new members and I'm glad I found it.
Thankx for anticipating the needs of new folkz.
It "sounds to me as if your focus is on rhyming more than projecting a thought or scene.
This obsession with the rhyme factor has minimized your rounding out the original intention; which is, (correct me if I'm wrong) the shock and after-shocks of losing someone you love.
This gives your piece a choppiness that we all aspire to avoid, unless we consider our work on some avante-guarde-level genre.
I'm confident that if you rethink it, you'll re-work it and re-present it for an adjusted rating. That would give me great pleasure.
Newbie opinions are just that, I have yet to Create an Item, but when I get it done, please feel free to visit my port and express yourself freely!
SM
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