This was very well written, and kept me wanting more with every word I read. I don't read very many short stories, but yours drew me to it and I just started reading it. Is this story based on actual events that happened to you? If so, my deepest condolences.
Either way you are very talented and have no advice or critiques to give, I only hope that one day I am as creative as you are.
You are an totally Awesome writer. I can't see anything wrong with your poem.
It pulled me in instantly and held my attention the entire time.
Just a little color would not hurt, only to pull the reader in even more.
Pick a color that you know defines your words here.
Whoa! I did not see that coming. There is not a rating on this scale to show how awesome this is! So i can only give u what they have on here. but remember it does not do it justice at all. your talent is well overdue for publishing, Pleasse keep up the good work and i will be checking in. I did not see anything wrong at all, then again i was totally distracted by your words.
This poem left me speechless, and it reminded me of someone I know. So, You did a great job, and would you mind if i added it to my personal collection?
And, Welcome to WDC!!
You are off to a wonderful start!
A Poem that seems to be about a person who is taming what is inside until it can be released. Like a battle raging inside fighting the good during the day. As soon as day falls the fogs appear and darkness engulfs the trees,, it can no longer be caged and thats when the fun begins.
This is what the poem says to me, am i any where close to that?
Any how you did a wonderful job and it made me think about how you came about with its words, but if i am wrong, if you don't mind would you enlighten me?
AWESOME JOB/ I WOULD NOT ASK YOU TO CHANGE A THING!
Keep on writin!!!!
That was an amazing story, I love these type of stories and i live for them. I usually read them in really thick books but you have a knack of putting them into a short story in which i loved way more than the books i have read. So bravo, great job. Give me more please, pretty please????
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This is an awesome poem and it found absolutely perfect and it sounds exactly like me. You just put my personal emotions in each and every word of it. Are you an empath or something? You would not believe how much you got me right on the nose. So how did you come up with this if you don't mind my asking? What was your influence and or motivation? Well I would love to hear from you on this, and SOO Loving your poem.
This site is awesome, not only do i get to post my poetry and enter it in a contest, but i also get to read and review others wonderfull and creative work. Although i wish there was a way to publish our work monthly or something to start off with. Use the contests to choose the poems that will enter that month.. It could be a small handheld poetry book from wdc only. something small and simple, and let others work get noticed by others and gain extra profits from wdc. I think it could be a great success.
Are u sure you are not a famous poet already, I really loved that piece. I hope you don't dispose of this, it could someday if not already be publlished... You are an excellent writer and encourage you to never stop! There is a lot of good writers here but i do believe u have the best of all talent.... I will be looking and watching for new things and see what you already have up! This was my Pleasure, and an honor to have been able to read your work.. Great , no, Awesome Job!
Nice job. But it seems something is missing to but not too much. I really like your poetry i have been reading them since we last spoke or shall i say wrote. Please keep up the wonderful job. You are very creative. Most writing is based on our inner desires and emotions, so if you dont mind my asking what was your muse to this piece?
That is very impressive and it made me recall my own past. The punctuality is very well done as well. Was this written straight from the heart or was this already composed before posting it here? Either or it is very good and it pulled me instantly from the beginning. You have a real talent and i hope your writing is very soon published. The best of luck to you in your contest, i hope you win!
WOW that was riveting and captivating! I really Loved it! Not a thing wrong here that i can see, but please keep writing this type. Cant wait to see more!]
Awesome Job
This is really great work. I found nothing wrong with it at all and it was quite enjoyable. To me, poetry is what is in the heart and the heart knows not spelling and punctuations. It only knows what it feels. This shows that is what was written so awesome job. Keep working and sharing your wonderful writing with others. Never stop, no matter what others say. JOB WELL DONE
That was an awesome poem and i greatly enjoyed it. Although the repeated paragraph is more to the sort of a musical form and is a little boring i guess. its just that one part made me want to skip over it. But still i wanted to read all the rest. So great job!
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