ERRORS Keep in mind that I only point things out that I see wrong or sound off to me. Most of this is only opinion and you can completely disregard it if you like!
I didn't see even ONE error in this. It was PERFECT.
OVERALL OPINION Keep in mind that I am one person! My opinion is just one! You may have many people with an opinion opposite of mine. :)
I love everything about this poem. The flow was great and smooth, the imagery I could really see in my mind's eye, and the rhyming scheme is one I am particularly fond of. I love free verse a lot, but sometimes it just feels better to read something wiith a set rhyming scheme (especially one with great flow like this).
CLOSING THOUGHTS
This is perfect! I wouldn't change a thing about it. I would even go as far as to say I would smack your hands (lightly) if you thought about changing it. Great job!
FIRST IMPRESSION
I HATE THE DENTIST. I am so sorry for the pain you suffered!
ERRORS Keep in mind that I only point things out that I see wrong or sound off to me. Most of this is only opinion and you can completely disregard it if you like!
There were so many errors in this that I have decided not to cite them here. There were also whole sentences that didn't make a lot of sense to me, but it could just be because I am tired.
OVERALL OPINION Keep in mind that I am one person! My opinion is just one! You may have many people with an opinion opposite of mine. :)
This needs some heavy editing, but the story is sufficiently creepy (to me anyway). I am terrified of the dentist, and even though I didn't understand a good portion of this, what I DID gather was the pain you experienced as well as the complete inadequacy of the doctor.
CLOSING THOUGHTS
Polish this a little and it could be much better. It mostly works as-is, but editing it would make it a great deal better.
FIRST IMPRESSION
This was beautiful but sad. It makes me wonder if it was based on a true story.
ERRORS Keep in mind that I only point things out that I see wrong or sound off to me. Most of this is only opinion and you can completely disregard it if you like!
I found no errors.
OVERALL OPINION Keep in mind that I am one person! My opinion is just one! You may have many people with an opinion opposite of mine. :)
Again, I like the simplicity of this. Without specifically naming many feelings, it still emits a lot of different emotions. Some conflicting, but overall, a nice balance of sad/hopeful. It was lovely.
CLOSING THOUGHTS
This actually left me wanting more. I wanted to know more about th eperson that inspired this or the story behind the narration.
This was every bit as good as the last poem I read of yours. It is sweet and fully of pleasant imagery despite the brevity. It evokes a sense of calm and gentleness.
I seriously really enjoyed this. I love how something can be so simple yet be packed full of so many things. Really great job!
ERRORS Keep in mind that I only point things out that I see wrong or sound off to me. Most of this is only opinion and you can completely disregard it if you like!
I didn't find a thing wrong with this.
OVERALL OPINION Keep in mind that I am one person! My opinion is just one! You may have many people with an opinion opposite of mine. :)
I have never written a Palindrome before, and this may be the first time I've read one. I found yours particularly clever and I could tell that you put a lot of thought into this. It was really great!
CLOSING THOUGHTS
I thoroughly enjoyed this. It was serious and well-crafted, and even though it was short and simple, it was still charming and clever. Great job!
ERRORS Keep in mind that I only point things out that I see wrong or sound off to me. Most of this is only opinion and you can completely disregard it if you like!
I found absolutely no errors in this at a glance. This is a rarity when I review.
OVERALL OPINION Keep in mind that I am one person! My opinion is just one! You may have many people with an opinion opposite of mine. :)
I know this was probably supposed to be serious, but a few things about it made it more of a lighthearted read.
"Here's Satan now, and you've been basted,
So enjoy the ride, until you're tasted."
That gave me a giggle. If that was your intention then great, if not, well, I'm sorry. ^^
CLOSING THOUGHTS
This made me chuckle, but given that it was probably supposed to be serious, I'm not certain that is a good thing. I'm not saying it is bad at all, just that I thought it funny instead of scary or serious!
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