Overall
Great story! Really a challenge! A story of only 55 words! I like the mood you created, and also the end of it. It leaves you wanting to know more about the story, wanting to know what happened before! Great job!!!
Spelling
I did my best and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Perfect choice for the title! It fits perfectly with what you wrote about!! About the description, and like I always suggest on my reviews, you can add a little more, to capture the eye of the reader easily. You can add that about the contest, in the body of the item, at the end, like an author's note. Just a tiny suggestion for improvement. You did a great job!
Keep on writing! And have a great day!
Take care!
Your friend! Winnie
Hi! Hope you are doing fine!
Thanks for your entry for my contest!
Overall
I like what you did with the prompt given, and I like all the words you used. It was easy to read and understand. It kept me reading from begining to an end. Also I like the kind of message. it's true, the love of children is selfless! Love that ending eith the last question. Great format, and great job!
Spelling
I did my best and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Like the title it fits well with the acrostic. About the description, is simple, and easy to understand, and it fits well too. Good choices! Thanks for the link to the contest, and also for your note at the end of the acrostic as usual.
Keep on writing! And have a great day!
Still judging! Prizes will be given tonight! Good luck!
I love the story. I always love how you write this kind of stories, where the children are the ones who teacher us about the Bible. Is beautiful! It kept me reading from begining to an end, and also, it teaches the reader a lot just by reading it. Great job!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Great choices for both of them. The title relates to what you wrote about, and the description calls our attention, and relates also with the body of the item. Great job!
Take care and keep on writing such great items for the community to benefit from. Great messages!
Thanks for your entry! Hope to see another of you on the next round!
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Overall
I like what you created. Easy and fun to read! Long sentences, and well written. Good job!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choice for title, and about the description, you can add something more that can capture the eye of the reader easily. I always gave that kind of suggestions, because that way you can have more reviews, or can be seen ealily, by capturing the attention of the reader.
Again, it's easy to read, and this on is also fun to read. It kept me reading from begining to an end. I like how you always add the prompt in the body of the acrostic, that gaves more meaning to it. Great job!
Again I like the rhyme you kind of give to the acrostic.
Spelling
Did my best again, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choice like I said before for the title, because it relates with what you wrote about, and also is the prompt given. The same suggestion for improvement as before about the description. You can add that like an author's note, and just use a frase that can capture our attention easily.
Keep on writing, and thanks for all the entries!
Great job!
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Overall
I like your acrostic. It's easy to read and understand from begining to an end. And the prompt you choosed relates with what you wrote about. I also like the rhyme, and that at the ending, you added the prompt. It gaves more meaning to the acrostic. Good job!
Spelling
I did my best, and I didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
The title is a good choice, because it's the prompt given and also relates with what you wrote about. Good choice! About the description, you can add something that can capture the eye of the reader easily. You can always add that is an entry for a contest like a little author's note in the body of the item. Try adding a frase from the acrostic, to capture our attention. Just a little suggestion for improvement!
Keep on writing, and thanks again for your entry!
Take care!
Winnie
Another great item. I love acrostics, and you did a wonderful job creating this item with all those acrostics. Good rhyme, and the message in it is great. Love that last author's note. Great message! No, I haven't been there, but it's amazing and it touches our heart to read all that, you are a fighter, and the purpuse of this item is beautiful, thanks for all the links, and your great job!
Spelling
Once more, you did an excellent job, no spelling errors.
Title/Description
I like the title, fits with what you wrote about, but about the description, you should add something more, that will capture the eye of the reader easily.
I like your poem. It has power in the words you used. Original! I like how you gave kind of movement while we read it, as you added such things, like the NO, and the exce$$ (very original). I also like the rhyme. Great job!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choices, about the description, maybe you can add something that can rather capture the eye of the reader easily. Just a little suggestion for improvement.
Thanks for sharing, and take care!
Keep on writing!
I like your story. It kept me reading from begining to an end. I got a little lost at the ending. I didn't understood too much of it. I love the begining, and how easy you narrate the events. Good job!
Spelling
I did my best (Spanish speaker) and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Good choices, you can elaborate a little bit more the description so it can capture the eye of the reader better. Good job!
WOW! This is beautiful. I have to say: Congratulations for such a beautiful item. Love the message! It's easy to understand, and the ending is my favorite part. I love the audio you added. Very original and I like the melody you gave it with your voice. Good idea to add that intro. Beautiful! Thanks for sharing!!! Great job!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors, well done!
Title/Description
Great choices for both of them. Great job!
Keep on writing such beautiful items.
Winnie
Good night!
I like it. It's kind of fun to read. Original! Good work!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't founs spelling errors.
Title/Description
Like I said before about the title, just take out the Haiku word, and leave only the title. I couldn't understand too much of the description, I think it's a little long, maybe you can make it shorter, and that way, it will capture the eye of the reader better.
This is another great and honest item. It's a great thank you know, because like you said at the begining, the purpose is to thank all who has gave you a review, no matter is it's a 5 stars or not, and also to let others know that no matter how many stars you have, or no matter the type of comments you receive, NEVER give up!! That's GREAT!!! I like the message behind it all! Great job! And thanks for sharing!
Spelling
Again I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors! Well done!
Title/Description
Good choices for both of them! Great title, and the description is easy to understand.
What I like most about your writing, is that they sound so natural, that is like talking to you instead of reading, like I said on my last review!
I like this very much, because it sounds very honest, and also, because it's original, organize, interesting, and easy to understand. It kept me reading from begining to an end. Is NOT boring, and you manage to tell us a LOT about you in a different kind of way, is like listening to you talking, instead of reading it. Great job! Nice to meet you!
Spelling
My main language is Spanish, but I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Great choices for both of them, straight to the point. Well done!
Keep on writing, and sharing with us your little world.
Have a great day!
Winnie
Why you don't like Dean Koontz? I LOVE his books, and I LOVE SKing!!!!
This is a good intro for your writings/port, and what "writing" means to you. (if we can compare it with that). Thanks for sharing. Very original! Good job!
Spelling
I did my best, (Spanish Speaker) and didn't found spelling errors! Well done!
Title/Description
Because this is like an intro, or like a way of letting us know who are you, and what you are looking for in your writings, etc. maybe you should change the title, so you let us know what the item is all about, so you can capture our eyes easily. Also about the description, you should add something more that can make us wonder, and run to read it. Good job!
Suggestions
A little suggestion for improvement would be to use simple words, not just complicated words, or phrases. That way it will help with the flow, and it would be easier to read. You don't have to make it sound so "poetic". Simple words can touch our hearts better than those kind of words. You started using a simple vocabulary and all of the sudden you changed the style using more complicated words, etc. Try it! Just my personal opinion, and a little suggestion for improvement. You did a good job!
This is great! I love all the words you used, and the image you created. It kept me reading from begining to an end. Great job!
Good job!
Spelling
I did my best, (Spanish Speaker) and didn't found spelling errors! Well done!
Title/Description
Good choice for a title, and about the description, I think that you should add something that can capture the eye of the reader easily. That can make us go and read it! Just a little suggestions for improvement. Good job!
Suggestions
No suggestions, just a question. Is this part of a story, or another thing that you are writing? If it is, I would love to read the completed work. Great item! If not, you should consider creating an entire item, based on this. It would be great! You did a great job!
WOW! This is a great item. I love it from begining to an end. You kept me reading without stopping. Great job! The only thing that I didn't like was that there wasn't a positive thing in there. There should be one. Every one has positive things on their lives. Look at the bright side! Life is wonderful, no matter it's ups and downs, we should be grateful to be alive. God bless!
Spelling
I did my best, (Spanish Speaker) and didn't found spelling errors! Well done!
Title/Description
Love both of the choices! The description can capture the eye of the reader asap. Great choice! Good job!
Suggestions
The only suggestion I got is to add a positive thing to the piece, if you like. I know there are millions of beautiful things that you can say. Or maybe, just create another part, the second part of it, being all the way positive about life. What do you think? You did a great job!
This is a good item. It's a little confusing, like you said in your description, is born from the confusion of being an adolescent. The mood was dark, and also very sad. Not positive at all! I would love to have read, something positive at the end, or in some part of the item. Well writen. Good job!
Spelling
I did my best, (Spanish Speaker) and didn't found spelling errors! Well done!
Title/Description
Good choices for both of them! They can capture the eye of the reader! The title makes us wonder, and we have to read it to see what you mean by that. Great choice. The description is more simple, and it's a good one. It captures our attention. Good job!
Suggestions
The only suggestion that I have is for you to add a positive element to the story, if you like. You did a good job!
This was a great entry for RAW! I participated on that last round. That was the last poem I wrote for the competition. My poem for the emotion: dread. Great entry! You made us feel that emotion. The ending is great! You did a great job with this poem.
Spelling
I did my best, (Spanish Speaker) and didn't found spelling errors! Well done!
Title/Description
Good choice for a title. About the description, it's a great item, you can make it catch the eye of the reader easily, if you add a little more to the description, besides letting us know the prompt. That can be added in the body of the item as an author's note. Just a little suggestion. Good job!
Suggestions
No more suggestions. You did a great job!
Keep on writing, and have a great day!
Winnie
Hope to see that contest again. I'll sign asap! Hope you do too!
This is a great poem. Beautiful image too! It must be beautiful and an unforgetable experience to be able to fly in a balloon like that. I haven't done that, and I know I'll never will. I have a phobia to high places, I would die in an instant from a heart attack, believe me LOL!
*ahem* like I was saying...
This is a great poem. Beautiful work, easy to understand, and that ending is my favorite part. Beautiful!
Good job!
Spelling
I did my best, (Spanish Speaker) and didn't found spelling errors! Well done!
I like this very much. In such a short poem, you told us a lot of feelings, and emotions you were going through. Love the words you used, they are simple and easy to understand. I like that ending. I think that you shouldn't change a thing, because it's all a part of how you felt, and also, it resumes it all. All your feelings, and even your question. GREAT job! Thanks for that note at the end. Well done! I like the attitude!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
Great choices for both of them. I think that you should add the at the end of the title. The description is good. It let us know the meaning, and what the item is all about. Good job!~
This is a beautiful poem, bull of inspiration and uplifting. Great job! I love every verse of it, and also the rhyme you added. It's true, we HAVE to let God enter in! Great verse! I also love the ending!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
I like the title, is a good choice. About the description, you should add a little of what's the poem all about, so it can capture the eye of the reader easily. It's just a little suggestion for improvement. You did a great job with the poem!
Take care and keep on writing such beautiful poems!
Winnie
This is a good poem. Full of strong emotions, and anger. You never let us know why all this happened. They are just your feelings and emotions towards all that. Good job!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors. Well done!
Title/Description
I like the title. You should capitalize it, (upper case) and about the description, you should add something that will capture the eye of the reader, that way we'll want to read it instantly. What you added, can be written as an author's note in the body of the item. You added that the poem is Dark. For me it's not dark, it's just a strong poem, with strong emotions, and anger. It's sad, and emotional, but is not a dark poem. It's just my opinion. You did a good job!
Suggestions
Another suggestion is that you should use: . , ! ?, etc, and also upper cases where they are needed. That way it will help with the flow, will look good, and we as readers can understand it better.
Take care and keep on writing. You did a good job!
You did a good job with this poem. I really like it, because it's simple, and easy to understand. It kept me reading from begining to an end, and I enjoyed the rhyme you added. Good job!
Spelling
I did my best, and didn't found spelling errors! Well done!
Title/Description
Good choices for both of them, the description by itself is good. Well done!
Suggestions
I think that a little suggestion for improvement would be for you to add the ./,/!/? etc, where they are needed, it will make it easier to read, and give the emotions each line needs. Just that, you did a good job!
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