Write Incognito's (writeincognito) Reviews

"For the rest of X‘s dreams were marked with blurry images and cold, calm and calculated voice repeating over in his head “kill him”. " - AMAZING way to end this. Makes you want to read more! But still- you do have some grammar errors. I recommend going through your stories with a fine comb and finding the errors.

Write On!

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Review of The Legend of X : the Team

Review by Write Incognito

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Critique- You have some basic grammar errors with quotations (ie. “I’m surprised Tarleton’s fat arse didn’t cause the stage to collapse” (btw, nice line), there should be some form of punctuation at the end of it, usually a comma), but other then that, nice writing!

Keep Writing!

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Review of The Legend of X : the Instructor

Review by Write Incognito

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

“if the world hates you, know that it hated me first” was my favorite line. It got me hooked right away.

Thinking of turning this into a book?

Also- Jones is rather coldhearted. Do you think he'll lighten up a bit further on in the series?

Keep Writing!

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#3445196

Review of Bumble Boy

Review by Write Incognito

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

This was phenomenal!

Easy visualization- this could well be a short film! I recommend developing this into a full-fledged novel!

And if you have this much money for reviews- why not sponsor the item using the bid click system?

Great piece! Keep Writing!

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#3444215

Review of Changing Days Part 1: Slow Change

Review by Write Incognito

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

I don't think I'm the first or last to say this is a VERY- unique idea. I notice you have a large reward for reviewing, so if you have this money, I suggest you advertise and sponsor this item. While the idea of men changing into women is not something new; the way you did it in this interactive story is the first I've ever seen something like this.

Keep writing!

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#3443712

Review of Love on a Seesaw

Review by Write Incognito

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

That was a frightening story- multiple personality is VERY scary. Makes you think. But I loved how Greg cared enough to stick with Polly through the end.
That was the only way to end this. But all in all- excellent story; great writing, plot, and ending.

Write on!