Hello there! Indelible Ink here, with - as promised - review of your work. But, before we begin, let's get the disclaimer out of the way: I am not a highly-trained professional. Actually, I'm not even a somewhat-trained amateur. That being said, however, I am also not of the opinion that you need some special skill-set to explain how - and why - you feel the way you do about something you just read. This is just my opinion, be it right or wrong, and you are free to take as much - or as little - as you'd like from my comments.
My review criteria is pretty straightforward, based upon the premise that I just sat down, opened up a magazine, and came upon your story/article/poem by chance. As a result, at the end of the day, all that really matters - to me - is: Was I interested enough to want to read this piece in its entirety, and why or why not? It's simply the same evaluation criteria I use when watching a movie. When it's over, all I really care about is whether I was entertained or not; I don't really care if the director was trying to convey other messages, or the methods he/she employed when making the film. It's irrelevant to me. Likewise, I didn't spend all day dissecting your piece; my free time is too precious (hence the use of this template), and I'd much rather be writing than reviewing. But seeing how I, too, like some feedback once in a while, it makes sense to concede that reviews are a necessary evil. When someone reviews my stuff, all I care is if they were entertained or not, and - if necessary, in their opinion - where I could stand to improve the piece. That's all I'm doing here. Fair enough? With that in mind, let's commence with the bash-fest (Just kidding)!:
1) Overall Impression: I am really, really glad I ate before I read this story! Great little tale...
2) Best Part(s): Actually, while discovering the source of the nuts was obviously funny, I enjoyed your desription of your feelings in the bathroom even more! The line "I reached for a towel, and stared at it, Who had used this before and what for? I was suddenly aware of germs" was great! I could relate easily with what you expressed!
3) What I Thought Needed Some Help: Nothing to speak of. I sailed through the story without having to go back and re-read something for clarification, which tells me you did a good job of relaying the story
4) Why I Gave It The Rating I Did: It was an enjoyable read; I easily painted a mental picture of the proceedings with the information you supplied, which is also a very good indicator that you did a good job!
5) Suggestion(s): Nothing to add that would significantly improve this piece - you did a fine job...
I certainly hope this was of some benefit to you. If not, come on over, read one of my items, and rip me a new one! After all: One item can produce a whole spectrum of comments; and I just love a little diversity! |
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