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Title: Stargazer
Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Very nicely done and a pleasure to read.
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Title: Behold the Master Key
Impression Of Title: The title is unique, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: I saw nothing at all I would suggest for perfecting this piece.
Overall: Nice originality. This poem captures the attention of the reader from the very first line and keeps the reader's attention throughout. This is a beautiful poem. You accomplished a simple and beautiful rhyme rhythm. The language in this poem is beautiful. You definitely have a true gift with words. You defaintly belong here, you have an amazing talent. Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem! One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!
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Title: Haiku-Singing Leaves
Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem, that caught my interest.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I really enjoy the imagery of it. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The language in this poem is beautiful. Very nicely done and a pleasure to read.
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Title: Haiku-Time Player Addict
Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: What a great poem you have written here. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. My favorite line was:
Time loves to play lives.
I thought this was the perfect way to end your poem. Very nicely done and a pleasure to read.
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Title: Haiku-Rose in Crystal Vase
Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Very nicely done and a pleasure to read.
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Title: Sing Silently My Heart
Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. About losing some that you love who has died. Really pulled at my heartstrings. I could just feel the agony and despair this person was going through. It is never easy to lose the one you love. If this is a true story you have my deepest condolences and prayers. May God help you through this trying time. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Although this was a very sad poem, I enjoyed reading it. Very nicely done!
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Title: loves perfect song
Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: I saw nothing at all I would suggest for perfecting this piece.
Overall: What a beautiful and touching poem you have written here. This was an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. This is a beautiful, well written poem that conjures up wonderful pictures for the reader. You definitely have a true gift with words. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:
And my love we will know
That nothing can go wrong
For you will free deep inside
Loves most perfect song
You wrapped that up with lovely words and made this poetry worth to read. A beautiful poem written straight from the heart that I hope many people have a chance to read and enjoy it as much as I have. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!
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I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "Invalid Item"
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Title: The Silent Tears
Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.
Overall: Thank you very much for sharing this. A poem on how it feels to have depression. I think that writing difficult pieces like this one that put your causes of concern out there are something every writer should pursue at least on occasion. I can really relate to this poem, I too suffer from depression. A lot of people do not understand depression. They just think you can pull yourself out of your depression at anytime. Which is not true. It is a hard life living with depression. If this is a true story, Please go and speak to someone. I think this is one of the best avenues to incite change upon. Well done. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Although this was a very sad poem, I enjoyed reading it. And again, thank you for getting the message out there, about how it feels to have depression.
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Title: I Hurt Myself Today
Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Overall: I found this poem is so heart catching, breath taking, and tear dropping. Really pulled at my heartstrings and brought a tear to my eyes. I did feel the agony of the depths of deepest despair. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. About someone cutting themselves to release their pain. As I read this poem, I just wanted to give that person a hug, and tell them everything was going to be alright. What a sad situation this person is in. I can not even begin to imagine what that person is going through. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. Deep expression of emotion. Powerful! The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. This poem was true to the subject and carried the message well. Very nicely done.
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Title: The Crystal Spires If Xanadu
Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem and caught my interest.
Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: I saw nothing at all I would suggest for perfecting this piece.
Overall: You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. How wonderful. While reading this I shared your adventure. Thank you for sharing this heart-warming moment with me. Nice originality. This poem captures the attention of the reader from the very first line and keeps the reader's attention throughout. There is beautiful depth of emotion and feeling which comes through in every line. The language in this poem is beautiful. You defaintly belong here, you have an amazing talent. I really enjoyed reading this because it was so beautifully written and a pleasure to read. One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author!
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Title: I wish my love
Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.
Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.
Overall: You definitely have a true gift with words. This was an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:
All these things I wish my love
But deep within my heart
The only wish I truly want
Is that we never part
This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem! One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!
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Title: Love Hurts
Impression Of Title: The title fits and is appropriate.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Absolutely pulled on my heartstrings. I did feel the agony of the depths of deepest despair. Yes, love does hurt some times. I think everyone has experienced this at one time or another in their live. But, I feel that you have to give love another chance, or you will just be a lonely person the rest of your life. Good poetry and though sad was a pleasure to read your poetic words.
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Title: Listen To The Rain
Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem, that caught my interest.
Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Well written poem that conjures up wonderful pictures for the reader. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. Very nice originality and great imagination. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I enjoyed reading this poem because it was well written and a pleasure to read.
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Title: You
Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: What a beautiful poem you have written here. You really used variety of words as well as metaphors and imagery that pertains to the senses to evoke feeling and picture. This is a poem about someone who you are in love with. There is wonderful depth of emotion and so much feeling is expressed in every line. The reader can tell that you love this person very much and that the two of you had a very special relationship. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part is:
I’m just happy to be lost in the flourescent fever of
You.
This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. Very nicely done and a pleasure to read.
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Title: Ring Ring
Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.
Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.
Overall: This poem really touched my heart. What a lovely poem you have written here. This is a beautiful, well written poem that conjures up wonderful pictures for the reader. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. You definitely have a true gift with words. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) was:
One day on the playground, was a boy in plaid.
She could see his soul, so lonely and fragile.
She knew he needed exactly what she had,
Proudly, she handed him the phone with a smile.
She told him it's magic and watched his eyes shine,
Say "Ring, ring", and your dad will be on the line!
Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem! You defaintly belong here, you have an amazing talent. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!
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Title: Everyday is a birthday
Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: I do have one suggestion. You started off with punctuation, but there is no punctuation in stanza 3. When using punctuation, you need to follow through the whole poem with punctuation.
Overall: I found this poem very inspiring. I totally agree with you that each day we are born again. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nicely done. I enjoyed reading this inspirational poem.
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Title: I Write
Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem, that caught my interest.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Speaks of why you write. This is a great concept for a poem. My favorite line was:
My words will live longer than my children, and theirs.
I liked this line because it is so true. If you area writer, your words that you have written will live on forever. Very nicely done and a pleasure to read.
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Title: Thaw (Clinquain-week 2)
Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: What a beautiful poem you have written here. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I really enjoy the imagery of it. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. You definitely have a true gift with words. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I must say that I think this was a pleasure to read and wondefully written. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!
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Title: Listen To The Love
Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellant, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word choice is perfect; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.
Suggestions: I can't find any suggestion to make this any better.
Overall: I found this poem to be very inspirational. It shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. Gods love is probably the most taken for granted thing in the universe. Which I think is just a shame. If people would only open up their hearts and listen to God. This world would be a must better place, in my opinion. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. This was an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love for God never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. Very nicely done and a pleasure to read. One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author.
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Title: Standalone
Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: I found this poem is so heart catching, breath taking, and tear dropping and really pulled at my heartstrings. About homeless people and how we just walk right by them. What a sad life they live. I can not even begin to understand what they are going through. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. I think that writing difficult pieces like this one that put your causes of concern out there are something every writer should pursue at least on occasion. There are so few ways to make people more aware and more involved in putting a stop to such atrocities, and this is one of the best avenues to incite change upon. Thanks for getting the message out there! Very well done!!
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Title: Highland Autumn
Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout.There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Conjures up wonderful pictures for the reader. Very nicely done, and a pleasant read to boot.
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Title: Spider
Impression Of Title: Good title and it caught my interest.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: You give a lot of description in this piece, which I really like. You bring a strong image to the reader's mind, as well as a subtle emotion. This poem was a most interesting read and kept my attention from start to finish! I really enjoy the imagery of it. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. Good poem and a pleasure to read.
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Title: I can't get no sleep
Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors. As far and spelling I did find some errors. In the 2nd line you need to capitalize the word (I) 8th line the word (Who} needs to be capitalized.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm was good. The flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Good imagery of what is is like not be able to fall asleep and things just keep playing over and over in your mind. Which helps the reader to see in her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Good poem and a pleasure to read.
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Title: 5 in a row
Impression Of Title: The title is great and perfect for the content of the poem, that caught my interest.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: What a great poem here and a lesson to be learned for sure. I can totally relate to what you went through. I have done the same thing a few times, but finally learned my lesson on gambling. I could just feel you pain when you spend all your money on gambling. I felts as if it were me at that casino machine. I have felt that pain a couple of times. Not a great feeling to feel. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem.This was a perfect way to end this poem. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. My favorite phrase was:
And as I started to rush back to that evil place,
I realized what I had left was one saving grace.
That was to leave now, go to sleep and forget.
And then not to dwell, no thoughts of regret.
So thats what I did and I never returned.
That day now a memory, of a life lesson learned,
Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. I really enjoyed reading your poem. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!!
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I'm reviewing your poem for The Paper Doll Gang General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: My Easter 2010
Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: What a beautiful poem you have written here about your family all being together on Easter. This poem conjures up wonderful pictures for the reader. As I was reading this I could picture myself right along side your family having all the fun. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. You can tell you love you family very much. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. My favorite phrase was:
I take a moment to look around,
happy faces, happy sounds.
I feel so lucky to be me,
and all because of family.
This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. Thank you for sharing this heart-warming moment with me. Very well done and a pleasure to read.
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