An excellent start! The writing is smooth and the characters introduced thus far are very believable.
I should know, I went through this same thing at least 4 times in my childhood.
If you aspire to write a novel, go for it....
The only thing preventing you from writing it, is yourself.
I thought the same thing after retiring from the military, how could a hard-corps soldier write a book, can't be done. I proved myself wrong. However, I love to write and since then I have written six novels and a book of poetry. All are self-published and I did not write them for profit, I wrote them because I want to write...
You can do anything you want, it just takes the desire and determination...!
Kudos...!
Write-On
Very profound and beautiful G.B I only wish I could have received such a wonderful letter when I was in combat in Vietnam.
Wonderful story
wonderful person who wrote it.
Well done and very interesting Scorpio. It would help if you edited it to get the gaps out of it, the gaps were irritating while reading. Otherwise, good story and creepy!
I know a bit of how you feel Jackenigut. My nephew was killed in a car wreck and I was with my sister throughout it. We cannot bring back a loved one, we can only hope that they are in the arms of a loving God. I felt the same with my close friends who were killed in battle. I can't bring them back, but God gives me sweet memories to go along with their loss.
Thanks for sharing this.
Beautiful. I need to come back and read some more of your poetry. I have been trying to write poetry for several years, but, I haven't reached this level yet. Thanks
You did an excellent job with this one. I dabble in poetry on occasion or for a contest once in a while, but I am no poet. You have the makings of a great poet.
Well done! A very inspirational piece. Welcome to WDC. I've been here for a while and have found many friends. Most everyone here are helpful and considerate, however, like any other place there are a few not-so-nice writers. You'll learn to stay clear of them. I noticed in you Bio that you want to be a writer? Don't ever let anyone say you can not be one. Writing is in the soul and for someone who loves to write, it's like a death sentence to tell them they can't. I have been writing off and on for many years and am still eager to put words to paper. I have a few inspirational articles that you may enjoy:
THE RUDDER (13+) The first hour of waking is the rudder that guides the whole day. #1493266 by Oldwarrior
and half a dozen more in my Inspirational Folder. Keep on writing, it's the only way to improve your craft.
The Centurion Longinus. Well done! I am no poet, but try on occasion. Mostly rhyming because I never studied it. I have won a few ribbons and just got 3rd place in the Journey through Genres with my love poem "forever".I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing.
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