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1,559 Public Reviews Given
2,107 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
My reviews typically cover: initial responses, technicalities and mechanics, favorite parts, areas of improvement, and overall impression.
I'm good at...
Honesty, and finding what works versus what doesn't work. I will never give you a rating I don't think your work deserves. I am also particularly good at spotting grammatical errors and typos.
Favorite Genres
Philosophy, Steampunk, Horror, Dark, Emotional, Science Fiction, Technology, and Political Science. I'm sure there are more that I'm missing.
Least Favorite Genres
Romance, Western, Religious, and anything froufrou.
I will not review...
Chapters and Novels, unless arrangements are made prior.
Public Reviews
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Review of BROKEN  
Review by Riot
Rated: E | (4.0)
Another really good one. You really have done a nice job. *Thumbsup*
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Review of ~~ME~~  
Review by Riot
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Kind of a fun rhyme and pace for a serious tone. Nice work. *Smile*
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Review of ASLEEP  
Review by Riot
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
You truly have a beautiful way with words. *Heart*
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Review of FIGURE IT OUT  
Review by Riot
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello there,

          *Thought* Initial Impression
Honestly, the first thing that comes to my mind is: Pull it! Twist it! Bop it! Pass it! *Laugh* But seriously, for how fast paced and redundant it is, it was a pretty good poem. I think it takes a bit of skill to pull of something with such repetition, so good work there! *Thumbsup*

          *Fleurdelis* Imagery and Feel
Although short, with even shorter stanzas, they each had a feeling and made a certain impression. Stanza three made me laugh. I'm not sure about the end message personally, but I suppose it works. I can't help but cringe sometimes when everything relates back to love, but that being said it isn't inappropriate or anything, just a personal thing.

          *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* Overall Impression
A quick poem with simple language. I wonder how it'd fair if you actually ever did decide to remove all the its at the end. Overall a good poem, and one that made me chuckle. Happy WDC Anniversary! Hope it's a great one. *Smile*


Write On!
Riot , founder of "Invalid Item" 
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Review by Riot
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Right on. I really appreciate this guide! *Thumbsup*
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Review by Riot
Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice guide! You should pretty it up sometime. *Smile*
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Review by Riot
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Interesting campfire. Great work! *Smile*
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Review by Riot
Rated: E | (5.0)
This looks fun! Too bad it isn't around anymore! *Wink*
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Review of Tree  
Review by Riot
Rated: E | (2.5)
A nice start to a poem. It needs a little work on grammar and punctuation. Perhaps you could add some metaphors for imagery, less 'telling' and more 'showing' - Don't give up, and welcome to WDC! *Smile*
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Review by Riot
Rated: E | (2.5)
I like a lot of this, but a lot of it is redundant. It could also use a bit of work in presentation and punctuation. Good start though! Welcome to WDC. *Smile*
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Review of Life and Love  
Review by Riot
Rated: E | (2.0)
Lots of words that repeat a lot, but a good start. I look forward to reading more. Try switching up the pronouns. A lot of s/he's everywhere. Welcome to WDC, hope to see more of your writing! *Smile*
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Review of Echo (slice)  
Review by Riot
Rated: E | (3.0)
Empty void is redundant. Very nihilistic and contradicting piece. Needs a little work but has potential. Good work, and welcome to the site! *Smile*
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Review of Cardinal Points  
Review by Riot
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello there,

          *Thought* Initial Impression
I loved some of the word choice in this poem. I enjoyed reading the transitions from East, to North, to West, to South. *Thumbsup*

          *Fleurdelis* Imagery and Feel
I thought there was some pretty good imagery in this poem. I particularly liked: morning blush seeps, dawn fire, chills the marrow, and balmy zephyrs. I think there was distinct wording in each stanza to help create the feel and ambiance of its moment. *Smile*

          *Magnify* Technicalities
If there was any strict form to this I couldn't find it. There were some consistences in repetition, like the first line in each stanza, to help the reader in the direction the poem was going. I personally would've liked to see some punctuation to help with the flow. I wonder how it would turn out if you added the punctuation and changed capitalization where needed. Also, I wasn't sure about the combination sharp breath slice. It just seemed a little awkward to me.

          *Star* *Star* *Star* *Halfstar* Overall Impression
I thought this was a pretty good poem overall, needing only a little bit of work on flow and word choice. Thank you for sharing your work and entering this round! Welcome to the site. *Smile*



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Riot , founder of "Invalid Item" 
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Review of To be a patriot  
Review by Riot
Rated: E | (3.0)
I agree with some of this, I disagree with other parts. It was an interesting and well thought out read. Nice work, and welcome to the site! *Smile*
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Review of Silence  
Review by Riot
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
I don't care for the capitalized words; it's lazy writing. That being said, this needs a bit of work in other areas, too, like grammar and proper paragraphing. You have a good start though, don't give up. *Smile*
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Review by Riot
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
That's an awful lot for a hook. Maybe you could do something simpler, but catchy? This needs a bit of work: grammar, spelling, typos, etc. You have a good start though, hope you don't give up! *Smile*
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Review of Foster Street  
Review by Riot
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
This is a good start. You may want to consider working on your grammar and punctuation a little. As for imagery and expansion, just take it line by line and ask yourself how much imagery each paragraph holds. Keep truckin' *Smile*
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Review by Riot
Rated: E | (3.0)
Not really my cup of tea, but you did a pretty good job. I wonder if it could use some punctuation where needed? Welcome to WDC, hope to see more of your work! *Smile*
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Review of Rusty  
Review by Riot
Rated: E | (3.0)
Looks pretty good! Welcome to the site. *Smile*
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Review by Riot
Rated: E | (2.5)
I like where this is going. Try to work on some typos and watch the grammar. (No spaces between commas, etc.) - I look forward to reading more of your work! *Smile*
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Review of Stuck  
Review by Riot
Rated: E | (2.5)
I think this needs a little work on imagery; less 'telling' and more 'showing' -- needs a little work on punctuation too, but you did a good job, this has good potential. Thanks for sharing, and welcome to WDC! *Smile*
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Review of Love Runs, Right?  
Review by Riot
Rated: E | (3.0)
Love's a little over played, but I think you did your poem pretty well. I appreciate your presentation! Welcome to WDC, hope to see more! *Smile*
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Review of SONG FOR GABRIEL  
Review by Riot
Rated: E | (3.0)
This is a sweet poem for one that is religious and spiritual. Nice work, and welcome to the site!
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Review of The Unknown  
Review by Riot
Rated: E | (2.0)
A pretty good worship poem, although not my cup of tea. It could use a little more imagery. Let telling, more showing. *Thumbsup*
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Review by Riot
Rated: E | (2.5)
A sweet tribute to a friend. I think it needs a little work on presentation, but you have a good start. Welcome to the site! *Smile*
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