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Review of THE DATING GAME  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
         The first thing I have to say is this story needs to be written in a larger font. How do you expect a reader to read your story if they can't SEE it? You should also identify paragraphs. No, on to the story.

         I The story was a great story. It held my interest and had me on the edge of my seat. I wanted to know if this Ian would show up. The anticipation was eating at me. The subject matter is very timely. i, personally, think that blind dating is dangerous.I did not encounter any spelling or grammatical errors.Thank you for allowing me to read this.


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Review of Patricia  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
         I really liked this story. It reminded me of the time when I grew up. The innocence that was going on at the time, is a bygone era is a sweet memory.

         You could turn this into a book, if you want to. I'd want to know more about Patricia. She comes off as being sweet and innocent, but is she? What about Rich? Is he a rover? Or is Linda his first relationship that goes all the way? Does he get a lot of peer pressure? And Linda? Is she the town tootsies? Or does she give the impression of being an innocent? Then there's Norm. How did he and Rich become friends? What's his backstory.

         I didn't encounter any spelling or grammatical errors. This story was put together well. However, I, like other readers, want to know more. Great Job! Write on!


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Review of out to sea  
Rated: E | (4.0)
         I really liked this story, although I usually don't read this genre. However, there was a few grammatical, punctuation, sentence structure problems. In the first chapter there are several. You should capitalize I, have the wrong punctuation in the sentences. This also occurred in the subsequent sentences and chapters.

         I really enjoyed the story.It made me think of how I would have felt if I was able to travel back in time. The mistake I made was reading it while eating my lunch. I apologize for the late review. This past week hasn't been a great one.

         Keep it up.Your writing is very good. Write On!


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Review of Weird Beard  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
         I usually don't read this type of material. When I began reading, it seemed boring. As I read on, I began to be interested. I did not encounter any spelling, punctuation, or grammatical errors.

         This story gives a first hand account of what a war veteran goes through after returning home. It put a chill down my spine. PTSD is a real problem that needs to be treated. I never knew anyone personality who was in a war.

         I remember seeing the Vietnam War on television. It was not a war the United States should have been involved in. Great story. Write On!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
         This poem left me wondering. Did the author accept the break up? Or did he want to find some way to repair what was broken, and begin again? That was my first impression. As I read on, I noticed that the girl ,being spoken about, was thought of in the highest esteem.

         I didn't notice any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. The poem flowed quite well. It was full of feeling and pleading.

         Was this poem read by the recipient? How did  he feel? I'm truly sorry for the break up.



         Keep writing. You're doing great*Smile*


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In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
         When I read this, I'll admit I didn't know what to expect. As I began to read, my eyes began to well up with tears. My heart ached for Annabelle. I must admit, I'm not a horse fan. When I was in Girl Scouts, I was almost bitten by a horse. My heart ached for both Abigail and Annabelle.

         How anyone can be so cruel, is beyond me. You had me at the first sentence. I did not see any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This was well written. Write On!


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Review of Trail's End  
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
         First, I want to apologize. I read this a couple od days ago. I read this story and its imagery screamed out to me and slapped me in the face. This is so touching, personal, and heart wrenching.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This was well written and thought provoking. The imagery was vivid. The words flowed like a gentle stream. I think you have a great chance in this contest. Good Luck and Write On!


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Review of CONFESSION  
In affiliation with Contest Central Station  
Rated: E | (3.5)
         I liked this story, but I found a few flaws. First, if this is supposed to be a letter or note, then it should be written in that form. There are several grammatical and punctuation errors in this piece. You have words that are capitalized and shouldn't and ones that are vice versa.

         You never reveal who the storyteller is. Is it a secret known only to the person being spoken to?

         This piece left me wondering. I think if you fix the errors and tidy this up, it will turn out to be a good piece. Write On!



























































































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Review of The Black Widow  
In affiliation with Contest Central Station  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
         This was a really great poem. Its rhymn scheme worked well in the poem. I really liked how the poem told the story of the Black Widow and her dasterdly deeds. It flowed well and the pace was just right.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This must have been for a contest since you had certain words bolded. Great Job! Write On!




































































































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for entry "The Twelfth Circle" 
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
         I usually don't read fantasy, but I liked this piece. It flowd smoothly, imagery was quite vivid, descriptionswas very graphic. I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors.My initial impression was one of being taken aback. As I realized it was a fantasy piece, I thought it would be boring. I was proven incorrect in my assumption. I was going to write a story for this prompt, but never got around to it. Great Job! Wrie On!


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Review of Rundown  
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
         This story had me on the edge of my seat. As I read it, the imagery was blaring at me. The comment about the men in blue stick together is so true. I'm the daughter of a retired cop.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical or punctuation errors. The story made me feel like I was right there with Tish. You did a great job with this. Write On!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
         Wow! You try to help someone and you end up getting your teeth kicked in. You would think a government agency like the Post Office would have interpreters on hand to assist customers.

         So much for my rant. I didn't encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This was a good story.I wonder what would have happened if the shoe was on the other foot.

         The imagery was vivid and clear. I was right there as the story progressed. You did a great job! You have to write more to fill your port. Write On!

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Review of Loosing You  
In affiliation with Let's help each other grow...  
Rated: E | (3.5)
         This poem was written from the heart. However, I did find several grammatical, spelling, and punctuation errors.

         I could her heart beat in love should read: I could hear her heart beat in love.

but we never heard out boat creak.should say :but we never heard our boat creak.

Till it burs-ted open i couldn`t help thinking of the fear i saw in her eyes i couldn`t help the pain i saw in her soul should read: Till t burst open. I couldn't help seeing the fear in her eyes. I couldn't ease the pain I saw in her soul.

But i felt pain when i heard the news she dead The last word should be died and capitalize the I's.

It was then that i couldn`t imagine myself believing the story but i had no alternative than to face life they way it presented itself to me.The I should be capitalized every time. they should be the.

Deeply inside my soul i was dead..... But life had to move on.
Deep inside my soul I was dead. But life had to move on.

         If you fix those errors, you would have a poem that would be a moving tribute to your friend. Write On!

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Review of Love Song  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
         This poem is written very well. It's a great example of reminiscing about someone you care about but have to leave.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. The story was told well in poetic form. When I read the last line of the poem, the first thing I thought of was the song"Turn The Page" by Bob Seger. I *Heart* that song.















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In affiliation with Let's help each other grow...  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
         By the way this piece is written, you must be a sci-fi fan. When I began reading this, I found it hard to follow. This is because I am not a sci-fi fan. As I continued reading, it reminded me of an old television show Lost in Space. I was able to follow along with the story a bit, so that made it easier.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. Your creativity is boundless. You can take this story anywhere and expand it any way. Good luck with it. Write On!















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Review of The Debt  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
         This dialogue had me from the first word. It reminded me of my twenty years reunion and how people treated me. Although I sensed there was a bigger secret or truth looming.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors.The story that the dialogue spoke of was vivid. It made the reader want to read more.

         This made me, as the reader waiting for more. I sense a possible story here. Great Job, Viv. Write On!

















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In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
         What a tale. Reading this makes me grateful that I live in Michigan. I remember hearing on the news about Ivan. I am so sorry about what happened to you and your loved ones.I did not encounter any spelling, punctuation, or grammatical errors.

         This is a well written story that definitely showed the reader what it is like to go through a hurricane. I have never encountered a hurricane or even a tornado. The most important thing is that you, your family{including the twelve paws], and your friends survived.

         I hope that you will be able to get things back to normal soon. Keep your chin up. God loves you and so do your WDC friends. Write On!


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In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
         This story surprised me. It also scared me. I did not encounter any spelling, punctuation, or grammatical errors. This story had an easy flow. The imagery was quite vivid.

         This story is full of suspense and thrills. I thought Amanda was a married lady who was cheating on her husband. A question I have is:Was Max a vicious dog before this incident?

         I felt sorry for James, but I didn't for Amanda. She got what she deserved. You did a good job with this. Write On! *Smile*




















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In affiliation with Blogging Circle of Friends  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
         This story had me going at first. Like one of your previous stories, I became bored at first. I liked how the story flowed. The images were very vivid. I don't know about Jill. She's weird. It just goes to prove that you can't trust anyone.Even if it's someone you've known for a long time.

         I didn't see any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This is well written. Good Job. Write On!

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In affiliation with Blogging Circle of Friends  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
         As I read this story, my first thought was the movie "Little Darlins". and also "Meatballs". This story was very easy to follow. I need to know what eventually happened to Jason?

         This story also had very vivid imagery. As I read it, I could follow along and watch the movie in my mind.

         I did not encounter and spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This was well written and thought provoking. This has happened and could again. Write On!

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Review of Down at the Inn  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
         As I read this story, all I could think of was "The Hotel California" I never saw the movie Psycho. I am really not into scarey horror genre.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This story was well written. The imagery was quite vivid. If this genre is most comfortable for you, you write quite well. You did a great job with this. Write On!


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Review of Suggestion Box  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
         This part of Writing.com is a terrific resource for all the members and guests. It offers an area to new ideas that may benefit the site as a whole. It is also a place to ask for help or to bring a problem to light to the site's creatorsThe StoryMaster and The StoryMistress .

         I have been a member for close to ten years. I have witnessed changes to the site over that time. Some of them, I was afraid of. I felt that I would not be able to use. Storymaster talked me through these new additions and I slowly began to feel at ease.

         Than you both for having a place to bring suggestions. Every pace of business should have one.















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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
         I am surprised that I have not reviewed this contest. Daily flash Fiction is a great contest. The entry has to be flash fiction. This means three hundred words maximum. Arakun the Twisted Raccoon provides three words to be included in the story. It is up to the writer as to which genre s/he uses.

         The story must be new, have a setting, character , conflict, and resolution. Also, include the words highlighted in the prompt.

         I have entered this contest in hopes of winning, but to no avail. This contest is one I definitely would recommend.

         You did a great job, Arakun the Twisted Raccoon . My paw print of approval.











































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Review of The Box  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
         This is the fifth review for the "Invalid Item"  I think you would be a great writer of thriller/mystery/suspense stories. This is another one of your gems.

         This story has to be finished. I want to know what riches, if any, is Jerry in for. This story kept my interest throughout. What will happen on August 24? Will Jerry forget and not go?

         Again, I didn't encounter any spelling, punctuation, or grammatical errors. This was well written and flowed easily. All of the stories I read were great. Thanks for allowing me to walk through your port.*Smile* Write On!















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Review of The Veteran  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
         My first impression of this poem was that it would be long and not too interesting for me. I was so wrong.

         This poem was very easy to read and I could imagine the scene as I read the words. When I reached the part about the veteran being in a power chair, i lost it. That made me think of two special guys. They were dear friends of mine and they, too, were in power chairs. One had polio and the other had muscular dystrophy.

         I did not encounter any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. This was well written, thought provoking, and emotionally personal. Thanks for a great read. Write On!
















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