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"Short Christmas Tune"   [E] by SunWriter

Mini-review: It's unfinished. Needs to be totally rethought. Is it supposed to be words that follow the tune or is it a parody? It doesn't work on any level, sorry. I rate it 1.8. I suggest starting over.

Prompt: What are your thoughts on this cute Christmas tune?

How does one trash a poem without trashing the poet? No one of any age needs to be crushed by a severe review but at the same time it's dishonest to applaud what is barely readable. I'm not just talking about this short unfinished ditty. I've read worse. And I've read 5.0 rated writings here that imho are no better than a 3.5. Are they only being read by friends?

At times it's painful to read what people consider poetry. Some would be better off sticking to prose (which has different rules) or telling stories (not my strength).

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