try describing things while also moving the story along. I looked her over, she saw this and blushed, her snowy white face turning a delicate shade of pink. She turned away from my gaze, her long, jet black hair swaying with the motion of her head. She tried to walk away, but her delicate, toothpick thin legs got tangled in her beautiful satin dress don't know how much this might help, but i hope it at least gives a starting point.
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