This review is in conjunction with 23 in 11 Writing Challenge.
My First Impression: Wow...I was drawn in immediately. I could picture the scene clearly in my head. It's funny, but I could picture Peter Dinklage from the movie Elf...
My Favorite Part: The sense of humor from the interviewee. "Oh, I'm definitely going to need a step stool for that." Cracked me up.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts: You've done well with this story. Good Luck with the contest. I loved it.
My First Impression: A wonderful reminder that we are not alone in this world. We have God first, and then we have one another, if we would only reach out.
My Favorite Part: the verse "Rise my friend, for you're not alone/God is freedom, the world we roam".
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts:Keep doing what you are doing. You are indeed a light and an encouragement. Thank you for sharing this with me.
My First Impression: A poem about perseverance - You never gave up and kept trying, year after year.
My Favorite Part:You made it - it may have been your last chance, but you made it! Hooray!
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts: You described this as a dream. Was it a literal dream, or just "dreaming of making it"? Good luck in the contest. I'm always rooting for you! Well done.
My First Impression: Isn't this the truth? Young and can conquer the world. Nowadays? Maybe not so much.
My Favorite Part: That even though you are older, and are somebody's "There but for the Grace of God, go I" - that you still have a care for the less fortunate. I'm glad I stopped and read your poem.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts: Keep up the great work. Blessings to you.
After reading your work, My impressions are these: A wonderful description of a family in acrostic form. I can picture it in my mind, for I was lucky enough to have a happy family growing up.
My Favorite Part(s) The phrase Laughter makes it lovely - such a true statement.
Suggestions/Questions: Again, other than enlarging the font, no suggestions. It is perfect as it is. Thank you for sharing your work.
After reading your work, My impressions are these: An encouraging poem on how angels can help, whether they are seen or unseen by mortal eyes.
My Favorite Part(s) An angel's smile washed the tears away. This probably would be a person who would smile, and being thought of as an "angel".
Suggestions/Questions:Other than enlarging the font a little bit for easier reading, this poem is well done. Thank you for sharing your work. I hope this year brings you closer to your writing goals. Happy WdC Anniversary.
After reading your work, My impressions are these: I was curious as to how this story would play out, as sometimes the title doesn't give the proper clue. It is a little bit sad, for the actor, to be leaving his performance, and no one having a clue to who he was.
My Favorite Part(s) Tarun encouraging Jane to make sure the show goes on, even if it isn't him behind the mask.
Suggestions/Questions: A well done story. Thank you for sharing your writing.
After reading your work, My impressions are these:Woah! This story didn't turn out the way I thought it would. Unfortunately for our protagonist, Guru.
My Favorite Part(s) The last line...A deafening roar, declaring the end of the war. Yikes! I've gotten chill bumps reading this story. Well done with very few words. You seem to have a knack for flash fiction.
I wanted to wish you a happy WdC Anniversary. I am nosing around your port for reviews to give.
After reading your work, My impressions are these: The title caught my attention. It is a fast paced story, which could have ended very differently.
My Favorite Part(s)That your protagonists were rescued and that the vultures had to go find another meal plan.
Suggestions/Questions: It surprises me that it is a complete story in so few words. Other than enlarging the font a little for my old eyes, I saw nothing that I could suggest for change. Well done.
After reading your work, My impressions are these: The title of the poem caught my eye. It reads quickly, and has a smooth flow to it. Jumping from idea to idea, much like my mind when I'm trying to write
My Favorite Part(s) Life is after all about lunacy...that is definitely one way to look at it. And when I see people and what they chase after - lunacy is definitely an apt description. Thank you for sharing this work.
After reading your work, My impressions are these: Oh to be immersed in that stream of endless words. Very poetic and a lovely image in my mind.
My Favorite Part(s) Your desire to dwell forever in the world of literacy. I can relate to this as well. If only I had the words to express what is in my heart...
Suggestions/Questions:Other than a little bit larger font for my old eyes...this is perfect. I know it was written quite a while ago, but its message is timeless.
I've jumped over to your House Martell folder. I see it is a take-off of Game of Thrones. The cover is beautiful, and the groundwork impressive. I'm not sure what all the hub-bub is about, but I am a fan of GoT (for the most part...LOL; especially the world building).
After reading your work, My impressions are these: This story is a bit more grown up, and I really didn't know where it was going at first.
My Favorite Part(s) The bit about the crab was comical. I enjoyed him "looking at me like I was a freak of nature". Well done.
Suggestions/Questions: Other than a bit larger font for ease of reading, I wouldn't change anything. I'm glad that your heroine was rescued. She really would have been in a pickle had she not been saved.
My First Impression:Yes, sometimes it does seem that days just go about repeating one another, like in the movie. But thankfully it only seems that way.
My Favorite Part: The encouragement to get past Punxsutawney and just continue with life and its new surprises. A promising future awaits us.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts:Thank you for sharing your work. I am blessed and encouraged by reading your writing, and I am grateful to be your friend here at WdC.
I am reviewing this work for the I Write Challenge.
My First Impression: What a cool story. My son follows Critical Role on YouTube, so I am somewhat familiar with a game like this.
My Favorite Part: Sacrificing yourself, so that your colleague can emerge victorious - then turning around to ask her out IRL...The ending was very sweet.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts: Enlarged font for ease of reading Drawing the reader in No mechanical issues A well done piece. Thank you so much for sharing.
My Favorite Part: The whole poem just reverberates with pain. I love the format that you've used. It makes it stand out. Also, the bold font and the italics make this stand out as well.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts:Keep writing! You have to have an outlet, and WDC is a good one. You are an amazing person.
My Thoughts:I found this poem in the Read & Review port. Wowzers! I am still shuddering after having read this poem. Thank you for sharing the prompt which inspired this seriously dark and twisted tale. Good name for the contest "Monsters Under The Bed" - this poem definitely belongs there! I'm going to have to read quite a bit of light-hearted works to help tamp down the "ick" of this poem. LOL.
My Favorite Part: I like the rhyme pattern you've used and it does follow the "Bicycle built for Two" style, as suggested by the prompt. I'm not sure which character scares me more: the pervert, or the sociopath with the knife
My Suggestions/Final thoughts: Your font choice made it easy for me to read. I am also partial to centered poems. It had a good flow and bounce to draw you in. Thank you for sharing, I think? You've definitely have the Horror part down pat.
My Thoughts:Found this one on the Read & Review port. It's the second one today that I've been directed to. It has been quite a while since you've written this (2002). Memories that are cherished of Grandma, and how nothing looked quite the same with her being gone.
My Favorite Part:The fondness of how you remembered grandma. Still missing her, and still having the handkerchief is a wonderful way to end your writing. I also love how it is written from a child's perspective - "I couldn't read Grandma's books yet." But the smell of the clothes in her closet made it almost like Grandma was still there.
My Suggestions/Final thoughts: The font and the line spacing makes it easy to read. I was a little curious about the three lines that were a little uneven with the spacing. Was this a prompt or something you just wrote down because of the memories? Do you even remember - LOL.
My Thoughts:I had to see what the hub-bub was about in the newsfeed. I laughed out loud after reading this piece. An amazing tale to fit the prompt.
My Favorite Part:The last line was it for me...A good thing that I wasn't drinking anything or I'd have spewed it all over my computer. I also liked that you made the font for ease of reading. The camel's dialogue is funny and a bit snarky. He tried to warn Pabhu and Michel - but of course, they didn't listen. Thank you also for the definition for the word "mahawi"
My Final Thoughts: You have a wonderful gift for this type of story. I am very glad that I read it. I saw no mechanical or grammar issues in your writing. The reading of it was fast paced, but I think that is what flash fiction is about. Thank you for sharing this cautionary and amusing tale (of only 244 words).
Hello Jay O'Toole I'm reviewing this after finding it on the Newsfeed.
My Thoughts:This is a wonderful reminder of the grace and mercy of our heavenly Father. When we call out in the name of Jesus, we are forgiven, and given new life. We don't deserve it, and cannot earn it; it is a wonderous gift from God.
My Favorite Part:That you remind me of the truths that God has chosen me, and has cast my sins away to never be remembered. The only one who remembers is me, and the deceiver of all men. So if God chooses not to remember them, than who am I to hang on to them?
My Suggestions:Centered, larger font, truth in beautiful poetic form...what more can anyone ask for? I also like that you emboldened the the words of the scriptures. Please keep sharing the truth. Thank you for this blessing, dear Brother.
My Thoughts: I like how you discuss dealing with negative comments. I found it informative, and encouraging, as I still struggle sometimes with negative comments.
I found your writing on the Read & Review port.
My Favorite Part: You give several ways in which to handle this. It is laid out in simple paragraphs, and is easy to understand. You also reiterate what you have gone over in the final paragraph. It is good to have several strategies for dealing with negative feedback. The one thing I have taken from this is to not take things personally. That is the hardest for me to do.
My Suggestions: The only suggestion I have, is perhaps to enlarge the font a little for ease in reading. I saw no grammar or mechanical issues with your work. Welcome to Writing.Com. I hope you will find a home here, and I look forward to reading more of your work. Thank you for sharing.
My Thoughts: I found your writing on the Read & Review port. As I was reading the prompt, I congratulate you on not running away. There were a lot of uses and forbidden words in the challenge.
My Favorite Part:The last verse is my favorite. Not matter the challenges, smiling and ready to "start the dance again". The whole poem is positive, and looking for ways to improve oneself. Even talking about "coming out of the maze" - and back into sanity. I also like the choice that you used in only capitalizing the pronoun "I". It is an interesting choice.
My Suggestions:I enjoyed reading your poem. The only suggestion would perhaps enlarge the font a bit, as it would make it a bit easier to read.
I thought I saw the word "a" in the forbidden words? You used it twice in your poem; but truthfully, it is just a technicality now, as it was written eight years ago. Did you win or place in the contest? Just curious. Thank you for sharing.
How simple God's truth, and yet how hard we make it on ourselves. I like how you put it in the last verse: We work for meat and clothes, but we don't have to work for Heaven. We need only accept the gift so freely offered.
Thank you for sharing your heart, as always, and for the encouragement. I wish I could make my poetry flow as smoothly as yours .
My First Impression: I was curious to see what you added with the V-day coming up.
My Favorite Part: My two favorite cards are Blessed be the Weirdos and You got this! All of the cards are visually impressive (the cupcakes made me hungry...again) There is an assortment that should fit anyone's need.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts: Thank you for creating and sharing these new cards.
Sincerely,
AmyJo
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