i've enjoyed the story thus far. i found the storyline interesting.. i love the idea about the spirit world and reincarnation.. i'd like to believe that we could reincarnate and chose our next lives.. i found the story so far to be romantic yet with a sad twist.. i really feel for them as they seem to be so much in love its tragic really.. makes one think about what happens after death and is there more then nothing when you die.. i think that you managed to capture the interest of the reader and keep their attention.. to me if i cant get caught in the story withing the first page then i move on to the next.. and i believe your story grabs the attention of the reader from the start.. great job and keep up the good work.. i look forward to reading more from this story.
I found the storytellers story to be intriguing the way he watched and his way of thinking. leaves me to wonder though who was actually the more evil one the boy who he imagined did all these things or the man that saw them in his mind. it leaves one to think which one was the actual evil character in the story.. was the kid really evil or was the man that saw evil in the crippled child delusional in his way of thinking. i enjoyed your short story very much and wish you the best of luck in your writings.
wow! i really enjoyed this story i found it entertaining and full of action. it held my attention and left me wanting for more. i am definitely going to keep reading this story to see how it progresses so far i have really enjoyed what I've read. It holds and captivates the audience and i was able to visualize the scenes as they played out.. good job :) I will wait till after you finish editing the chapter and i was wondering if you could let me know when its been updated.. thanks.
the prologue has a good and steady pace to it, i found it easy to follow and was able to get a small idea of what the scenery was like but wasn't really able for form good picture of the village in my head. i'd like to see a bit more description of the village with a more detailed view of where they are and what the scenery around them is like. i liked the idea of the simple conversation between the couple to set a simple but romantic mood as well as their fear and excitement over seeing the dragon. I like how you left the prologue hanging leaving wonder on what the three men are up to. enjoyed the small introduction leading to the first chapter and i am looking forward to reading more of the story.. other then the vague description of the village i thought it was nicely done.
i did find this short story very entertaining about how sometimes what you see isn't what you get.. It was a fascinating read i really enjoyed it. it even put a smile on my face at how it was a story that didn't have a happily ever after. where as i love happy endings sometime its more realistic to think of it from a less happier side.. keep up the good work :)
i have read both synopsis and where they are both very riveting and enjoyable i think this one does tend to draw you in faster. it seems a bit more focused and put together. so if you would like my honest opinion i think this one would have the more stronger pull to draw in readers but either would work but i must say that i tend to find this one a better choice of the two.
I thought the Synopsis was interesting about how she gained her mysterious new power and that it landed her across the universe to a wizard who finds it in his heart to protect her. it drew my attention in and i'm actually looking forward to reading more of your story. it did catch my attention and pulled me in. From what i have read i'm hoping to see not only a world of magic and mayhem from his need to protect her but perhaps a blossoming romance between the two. I really enjoyed what i have read so far and will be looking into reading more of your story.. yours was the first item i was able to read and enjoyed in my short time here. great job and keep up the good work. :)
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