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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Rosei, I am reviewing your poem "The Other Side of the Mirror Never Smiles" on behalf of games of thrones here on WDC.

Rhythm/Rhyme: I am a fan of free verse and I liked what you did here. Your flow needs a little work, but it was easy enough for me to read, and I don't think that it detracted from the image that you portrayed.

Imagery: I enjoyed your description of the "other" staring back at you in the mirror. My favorite line was, "When I see you I'm reminded of the overwhelming feeling of drowning, maybe that’s why I hate the beach..." That part spoke to me on an elemental level, because I too have looked upon myself in the mirror, and felt as though I were drowning.

Impressions: Overall the poem was well written with a few punctuation errors. I think your sentence structure could be improved, but all in all a solid read.

This review was written freely in thanks for a writing that was written freely.

Note: I am writing on my iPad and my spelling may be slightly off, please excuse any typos


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Review of Bitten  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Girl Girl I am reviewing your story "Bitten" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ This story is about a man and his fear of his spiders. The mans fear is so great that he builds his house up high far enough away that the spiders can not reach him. Well one day the man decides to venture to see his love interest and the spider chooses this time to seek his vengeance out on the man for ruining his spiderweb.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: There were quite a few errors contained within this short story and I feel like this writing would read better if it was broken into sections.

For example, "Once upon a time there was a middle aged man. He was extremely afraid of spiders. He was so paranoid, that he lived up high. High enough that they could not reach him well one day he was on his way to see his lady love, low and behold he had now idea that he was being followed."

I think the section would read better if it was written like so:

"Once upon time there was a middle aged man and he was afraid of spiders.

He was so paranoid that he lived up high. High enough so that they could not reach him. One day he was on his way to see his lady love, but low and behold he had no idea that he was being followed."

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I spotted a few common spelling and grammar errors, I believe their short needs another read through, and afterwords it would be a fantastic read.


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Review of Bitten  
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Girl Girl I am reviewing your story "Bitten" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ This story is about a man and his fear of his spiders. The mans fear is so great that he builds his house up high far enough away that the spiders can not reach him. Well one day the man decides to venture to see his love interest and the spider chooses this time to seek his vengeance out on the man for ruining his spiderweb.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: There were quite a few errors contained within this short story and I feel like this writing would read better if it was broke. Into sections.

For example, "Once upon a time there was a middle aged man. He was extremely afraid of spiders. He was so paranoid, that he lived up high. High enough that they could not reach him well one day he was on his way to see his lady love, low and behold he had now idea that he was being followed."

I think the section would read better if it was written like so:

"Once upon time there was a middle aged man and he was afraid of spiders.

He was so paranoid that he lived up high. High enough so that they could not reach him. One day he was on his way to see his lady love, but low and behold he had no idea that he was being followed."

♥ Spelling/Grammar:

♥ Overall:

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In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Quarter Over, I am reviewing you short story "Mrs. Anderson and the Closet" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ This short story is about a student who dreads school because of his librarian, Mrs. Anderson. He dreads attending school, because he is afraid of the punishment that he may receive, because of his failing to turn in a library book that he damaged.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: Your sentence structure needs a bit of work.

For example, "Mrs. Anderson looked at them with daggers in her eyes, and gave a s,Ike. She simply said this. "Clean the closet."

I think it would read better if you changed the sentence structure to: "Mrs. Anderson looked at them with with daggers, gave a smile, and said, "Clean the closet."

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I spotted no common grammar or spelling g errors, the story seems to be well written.

♥ Overall: The story was well written and very entertaining. I enjoyed your tale of "the closet", and frankly by the end I was a little afraid of the closet myself.

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Review of Fifty  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi safarimama, I am reviewing your poem "Fifty" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ Sometimes I am left momentarily speechless by words written and this is one of those time. I felt the love flowing on outstretched arms to me, and I felt the emotion in your words, and they tore at my heart strings.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: This poem was written really well.


♥ Spelling/Grammar: I spotted no common grammer or spelling errors.

♥ Overall: I really enjoyed this poem. Tears actually managed to well-up within my eyes. So cheers to that.

• The lines that spoke to me most are:
How many stars have watched
My fifty turns around the sun? That first line is so powerful because there are over a billion stars in the sky and I honestly don't know how many have died and burnt out and rose up over the span of the fifty years that you've been alive. I loved the imagery that you provided. I am honestly not doing this piece justice with my review.

I feel like your emotion fried some brain cells for sure! I really enjoyed this piece and I look forward to reading more from this author.

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In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Harry, I am reviewing you poem "The River Horse" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ Harry to be frank I initially wanted to review your poem because of the title alone. Although, just to correct it. I've never heard of river horses, I've heard of "salt water" horses or feral horses, but never river horses. So I was intrigued as to what may have prompted the title of river horse. Which I guess, would be that the horses are found near rivers.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: The poem was well written. I have no suggestions for you at this time.

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I spotted no common grammar or spelling errors.

♥ Overall: I throughly enjoyed your piece. Feral horses are the father of their kind and are considered to be spiritual and majestic to many people. They are beautiful creatures, and it's such a shame how many are hunted down and killed annually. Thank you so much for writing this.

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In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Jakrebs, I am reviewing you story "The Issues of Issues" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ This biographical comedy is about a guy who somehow manages to say something wrong on his date, and the date is summarily cut short. The man in question then decides that he will come up with a "Top Ten List" of times to that a guy should reveal personal baggage to a partner. This post was funny, witty, and highly entertaining.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: The list was well written. I have no suggestions for you at this time.

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I spotted no common grammar or spelling errors.

♥ Overall: I really enjoyed your writing. It was really funny, the best part was number 3. "You can ad lib them into your wedding vows (Ex: In sickness and in mental sickness)." Oh, man that was too funny. I could actually see that happening or actually have happened to someone. Thank you so much for writing this.

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In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Angel_Eyes, I am reviewing your story "Letter Home to a Veteran" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ Dear Angel, my heart bled for you as I read your letter to your husband. I am so sorry for your loss, but I thank you for sharing yourself with us here on wdc. I felt your emotion through this letter, and I can almost guarantee that your Doug hears you. He sees you, and he still loves you and the girls so very much.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: This letter was written well.

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I spotted no common grammar or spelling errors.

♥ Overall: This letter was emotion laden, and it actually took me a minute to process the emotion here. Things of this nature tend to leave me drained emotionally, which is a good and bad thing. Thank you so much for sharing your husband with us, for sharing his memory. I enjoyed the glimpse that you allowed us into your soul.

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Review of The Prankster  
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Rated: ASR
Hi DBKC / Functional Melancholic, I am reviewing your story "The Prankster" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ I am a bit mixed up in regards to this story. I honestly do not know how to feel. My interpretation of your story was, a man for as long as he's been alive has made people laugh through his antics and humor, but as time goes on he discovers how truly lonely he actually is. He begins to wonder, is this all that I am to them, funny? And then with the rejection of what he feels is all he has from his father further pulls him down into that rabbit hole of rejection.
♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: Your story was cleverly written.
♥ Spelling/Grammar: I did not spot any common spelling or grammar errors
♥ Overall: The humor is what I initially came for, but I stayed for the emotion. This piece touched me because I was once that funny and clever girl and when that failed me, I thought it was the ultimate rejection, and I felt that I was also forever friend-zoned because of it. So I thank you for sharing your writing with us. I enjoyed your story immensely and I look forward to reading more of your work.

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Review of A DIET OF NEGLECT  
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi Dr M C Gupta, I am reviewing your poem "A Diet of Neglect" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ I enjoyed your prose, and the message contained within. Neglecting your diet is neglecting your health and that is something that we must protect. We need to protect our health.
♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: There was nothing that I saw that needed to be changed or corrected, but I will say this, I did have a problem with your usage of the word disease, but I believe that is more of a personal reaction rather than a helpful suggestion. I personally feel as though the poem would read better if you found an alternative word for disease.
♥ Spelling/Grammar: I spotted no common grammar or spelling errors, well done
♥ Overall: This was a simple poem about what can happen when one neglects their health and how important it is to remain conscious of that and to make healthier choices.


Thank you KMS

This review was given freely in exchange for a story that was written freely, thank you, Dr M C Gupta, for allowing me to review your short story.

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Review of Best Served Cold  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Child of Loki , I am reviewing your Best Served Cold story on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ This story was a joy to read. Jane was human, but she was forcibly genetically modified by Morgana and turned into a feline mix. Thus, Jane is half human/half feline, a hybrid and then we have Edward. Not to give too much of the story away, but something happens between the two of them that alters their lives in a very specific way.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: Your story was done in great detail, I really loved Jane, and I can't wait to learn more about her. I want to know more of her backstory. Also, Edward, I have so many questions for him! What happened to his memory? And what happened to him in general?
♥ Spelling/Grammar: I did not notice any common spelling and grammar errors.
♥ Overall: From the very beginning this piece grabbed my attention and I immediately wanted to know just what happened to Jane and why Edward could not remember. This story grabs your attention and won't let go.

•◘ I did have one issue, Morgana. She annoyed me so bad. lol. She just wants to use her "puppets" for her own personal gain, never mind what she does to them along the way, just as long as her purposes are fulfilled. I did not like Morgana, while I understood her reasonings they were very logical, I felt like she could have gone about things very differently. I mean, she is the oldest of her line, and powerful. I will definitely read more of this story. Also, this story for me was reminiscent of "The Breeds" by Lora Leigh,


This review was given freely in exchange for a story that was written freely, thank you, Child of Loki, for allowing me to review your contest entry.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Winnie, I am reviewing your What's In The Box on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ I really enjoyed this short mystery story. I was rooting for Debbie through out the entire story.

♥ What I liked: I really liked the intrigue of the story. I was at the edge of my seat for the last five paragraphs. I enjoyed how you set up the plot. The pace was neither too fast, nor too slow. The reader was able to transition smoothly.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: The story was well written, I do not have any suggestions.

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I did not spot any common grammar or spelling errors.

♥ Overall: This was a heart racing action packed story. I had a really bad feeling about Debbie, almost from the beginning. I went through several emotions while reading. This was a really good action and adventure read and I look forward to reading more of your work.

This review was given freely in exchange for a story that was written freely, thanks Winnie for allowing me to review your short story.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Winnie, I am reviewing your What's In The Box on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ I really enjoyed this short mystery story. I was rooting for Debbie through out the entire story.

♥ What I liked: I really liked the intrigue of the story. I was on the edge of my seat for the last five paragraphs. I enjoyed how you set up the plot. The pace was neither too fast, nor too slow. The reader was able to transition smoothly.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: The story was well written, I do not have any suggestions.

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I did not spot any common grammar or spelling errors.

♥ Overall: This was a heart racing action packed story. I had a really bad feeling about Debbie, almost from the beginning. I went through several emotions while reading. This was a really good action and adventure read and I look forward to reading more of your work.

This review was given freely in exchange for a story that was written freely, thanks Winnie for allowing me to review your short story.

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In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Jungurait8 I am reviewing Chapter one of your, The Opened Tomb The Shaman's Trees: Rise of the Shaman on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ I really enjoyed this chapter of your story, and I believe that it was a great start to the series. This was my first time reviewing something written in the teen category, and you have made me rethink some of my reading choices.

♥ What I liked: I really loved the Indian names, and I really enjoyed how you went into details with describing your characters day to day routine. I also, loved the fact that in the beginning Dakota's life seems very ordinary, mundane even, but towards the end of chapter one the reader will soon realize that Dakota's life will soon be anything but.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: I have a few suggestions, this story would be great if you worked on your grammar a bit more. If you did a a few read through and fixed those errors, you chapter would read a little easier.

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I found quite a few common spelling and grammar errors.

♥ Overall: I really enjoyed chapter one of your story and I can not wait to read chapter two, I need to know what happens next. Will the evil man come for Dakota or will Dakota beat the evil guy. Also, I really dislike that Jack fellow.

This review was given freely in exchange for a story that was written freely, thanks Jungurait8 for allowing me to review chapter one.

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In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey Sharon, I am reviewing your Captain Kid's Search for Buried Treasure on behalf of Games of Thrones here on WDC.

I really liked this story, and I laughed a great deal when I found out just who or rather what Captain Kid was.

What I liked: This short story was a fun tale to read. Bobby was my absolute favorite of the bunch, although, Captain Kid came in at a close second. I really loved the ending, and I did not see that coming which was a surprising delight.

Things I noticed/specific suggestions: I have no suggestions for this fun little short. It was sweet and happy as a kid's tale should be.

Spelling/Grammar: I did not notice any spelling or grammar mistakes, the short story was well written.

Overall: The short story was a fun and easy read. The tale would leave anyone feeling courageous and daring, much like the children within the tale. This story is bound to provide anyone who reads it with a breath of fresh air.

This review was given freely, in thanks for a writing that was written freely.

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Review of One By One  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hey KassCatS, I am reviewing your One By One.

The woman within the stories pain could be felt all through out the story and my heart went out to her. Her loneliness that haunted and chocked her.

What I liked: I loved the morbid feel of the short. Its bleak, and depressing, but oddly I found light within the darkness. The story was bleak, but it also, you could tell that the woman was loved also. I loved the interaction between mother and child. I could actually picture the mom saying, "You need to rest now." That truly touched my heart.

Things I noticed/specific suggestions: I have no suggestions for you, I really enjoyed this short story in all of its bleak glory.

Spelling/Grammar: I did not notice any spelling mistakes or common grammar issues. The short story was written well.

Overall: The poem is sad, depressing even, but there are some light moments that made the ending that much more. I really enjoyed reading this, and I thank you for writing something so emotionally stirring.

This review was given freely, in thanks for a writing that was written freely.

House Greyjoy - "Game of Thrones" 
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Review of Blue Coma  
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Good evening Miles, I am here to review your Blue Coma.

Blue Coma is an apt title for this short story. I thoroughly enjoyed this short read. but I did not expect that ending that is for sure! Wow. Very wonderful read.

What I liked: I enjoyed the aspect of unconsciousness to awareness. I truly loved that whole aspect. I really enjoyed the ending. What a surprise, and everything flowed so beautiful.

Things I noticed/specific suggestions: I enjoyed every aspect of this mysteries short story. There is nothing that I truly believe detracts from the story. This short was a joy to read.

Spelling/Grammar: There was not anything that I saw that needed correcting grammar wise, but there was one spelling error that I spotted:

"Perhaps they have me medicated, tes, I must be sedated. - Tes, should be yes. The short is well written otherwise.

Favorite Quote(s)/section(s): "I see. No! I perceive. I perceive movement. No! shadows of movement is a better description of what I think I see. Do I really see them, or is it just a perception.." I found that part to be very telling. The whole entire short story is about perception and I loved that very much about this.

Overall: This mystery short story was well written. I enjoyed the tale of unconsciousness to consciousness. I look forward to reading more of your work.

This review is given freely in thanks for a writing that was written freely ♥

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Review of Blue Coma  
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good evening Miles, I am here to review your Blue Coma.

Blue Coma is an apt title for this short story. I thoroughly enjoyed this short read. but I did not expect that ending that is for sure! Wow. Very wonderful read.

What I liked: I enjoyed the aspect of unconsciousness to awareness. I truly loved that whole aspect. I really enjoyed the ending. What a surprise, and everything flowed so beautiful.

Things I noticed/specific suggestions: I enjoyed every aspect of this mysteries short story. There is nothing that I truly believe detracts from the story. This short was a joy to read.

Spelling/Grammar: There was not anything that I saw that needed correcting grammar wise, but there was one spelling error that I spotted:

"Perhaps they have me medicated, tes, I must be sedated. - Tes, should be yes. The short is well written otherwise.

Favorite Quote(s)/section(s): "I see. No! I perceive. I perceive movement. No! shadows of movement is a better description of what I think I see. Do I really see them, or is it just a perception.." I found that part to be very telling. The whole entire short story is about perception and I loved that very much about this.

Overall: This mystery short story was well written. I enjoyed the tale of unconsciousness to consciousness. I look forward to reading more of your work.

This review is given freely in thanks for a writing that was written freely ♥

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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Graham Douglas, I'm here to review your short Coffee House Debate.

What I liked:
This was an interesting piece thats for sure, this is the first piece of its kind that I have read on Writing.com so it was refreshing to say the least. Also, I loved the history within.

Things I noticed/specific suggestions:
I do not have anything of worth to write here. The writing was done exceptionally well. I could not tell whether it needed any further correction.

Spelling/Grammar:
Everything is written and grammatically correct.

Overall:

Simple and short read with some historical elements to it.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Good morning TheexiledOne this is my review of your My first time writing my thoughts.

What I liked:
I loved how passionate this piece is. At first I wasn't too sure where you were going with this. I assumed at first that this would be a piece about how dreary life is for you, but it turned into a heartbreaking, passionate piece. Very nice!


Spelling/Grammar:
Your piece is well written. I could spot no common grammar mistakes

Overall:
Your piece was lovely. I enjoyed myself immensely. I hope you continue writing.

Thank you for writing this awesome piece. This review is given freely in exchange for a writing that was written freely.

Thank you,
KMS
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Rated: E | (4.0)
}Characters:

Liam, and a mystery woman. I enjoyed Liam, I loved his description of the most precious thing to him, his flowers. I loved that he was passionate about them.

}Setting:

The setting was nice, and everything seemed to flow really well.

}Overall Impression:

The flow of the story was great, and I enjoyed the interaction between the characters. I wish there was more before the "big scene". I felt like there was something missing, that there was not enough emotion in the story between Liam and the mysterious woman. I loved the ending, and the many possibilities.

Thank you for sharing,

KMS

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Rated: E | (4.5)
That was beautiful to read. I wont bother critiquing anything, because there is simply no need to correct perfection. Your dad is very proud of you, and probably smiling down on you as I type this. I am so happy that you chose to share this beautiful piece with us, and I am so very sorry for your loss. I wish you well, and I hope tomorrow is a brighter day.

Thank you for sharing,

KMS
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Review of Winter Storm  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello R. Walter Smith this is my review of your Winter Storm.

What I liked:
This was an interesting piece, and provoked some pretty strong emotions!

Things I liked about the piece:
I loved the fact that you combined winter, and your thoughts/emotions. I love your prose

Spelling/Grammar:
Your piece is well written.

Overall:

Your poem was a thought provoking piece, it made me wish that it was a little longer. I loved reading it, and I will head over to check out your other pieces.

Thank you for writing this awesome piece,
KMS
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for writing this Kenzie! I agree on so many levels. It gives authors a chance to show case their talent in an environment conducive to the betterment of them, and it gives the readers the chance to read and discover new material(s), materials that they probably would have never even found if it were not for writing.com.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I really adored this short story, but poor adventurous Marisa!

What I loved most about the story?

I enjoyed the ending the most. The readers are left to their imagination to determine whether the story had an HEA, and I would love to think that Marisa, and her man are on the island sipping wine, with two point five kids.

It was a good story, with a few minor punctuation errors, but all in all a solid read.
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