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Review of My Wife  
Review by Thaddeus Ansch
Rated: E | (3.5)
Truthfull- too much exposition, It could do with more action based exploration; by that I mean
-Dialogue
-Tense scenes like seeing a specifically odd decidious tree that sets up somehting
-interior monologue
-etc. There're other ways of going about it look it up

Your action scenes could use some work- structure wise it's fine- try some of Stephen King's works, it reads well like in the Gunslinger
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Review by Thaddeus Ansch
Rated: E | (3.5)
I have to say, a good effort but could use a lot of plot doctoring, Try learning the three act structure or going through with this. It could work though with some effort
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Review by Thaddeus Ansch
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I like the tone and the theme, it could belong in an anthology but I have to say, it could be well to do if written longer.
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Review of Darwin's Choice  
Review by Thaddeus Ansch
Rated: E | (3.5)
Overall flow is good, just a bit of fleshing out of characterization though.
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Review of A Starry Night  
Review by Thaddeus Ansch
Rated: E | (4.5)
Maintains a good sweet atmosphere :)
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Review by Thaddeus Ansch
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hmm, Good call- but a little more on the origins of the rock.
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