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Review of Ignore  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
pretty good.

There some words are run together and other words miss-spelled but maybe the misspelled words are on purpose? They are like the teen-agers text. Maybe thats your point?

Anyway, write on!
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Review by Author00
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Good explanation of a person who has lost all faith in ones self and in GOD.
A person who has, in selfishness, turned to drugs and alcohol to sustain themselves.
As is illustated - its a dead end street that certain business people are happy to lead a people down.
(And I do mean 'down'.)

A quote from my novel "Growing Up Christian - - - Or Not!"
'Some people can't tell the difference between the truth and a lie, whether they are listening to it or telling it!'
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Review of Night Crown  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I don't really understand what is going on but it is pretty good.
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Review of Linchpin  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I thilnk this is too deep for me - my mental capacities are not suffecient to understand most of it.

They breathe the 'placid', oscillating air,

I would have put 'putrid', oscillating air, (but thats just me)
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Review by Author00
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very good.

It about as sad as you can get, but we are all going there if we don't pass away first!

Write on!
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Review of Vacillating  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Pretty good.

Very sad.

Write on!
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Review of Live in me  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very good.

No problems I can detect.

Write on!
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Review of Simple Man  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Prett Good.

The phrase "the convoluted day" seems to get a little tiresome for me, but thats just me.

Write on!
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Review of The Waiting Game  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Pretty good.

I have been there and done that!

Write on!
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Review of Any Hope  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Very good, exciting.
You have the same problem I have - I can't see typos (among other things) in my work either. See the below phrase from your work.
My blood runs cold ' has' I hear her cry for help.
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Review of Smiling Fool  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Pretty good.
That describes the postion many of are in - its all we have to set us apart.
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Review of Who was Jesus?  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
If you really want to know who Jesus is, read the first chapter of the Gospel of John.
He tells us in no uncertain terms.

Its too bad many people don't read their Bible or don't believe it if they do.
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Review by Author00
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I am trying to be 'a city on a hill' but am having a hard time getting noticed.
My novel 'Growing Up Christian - - - or Not!' is not your usual Christian novel.
It give practical examples of how Christians act and how unbelievers act.
Its an action, mystery, psychological thriller.
I really don't think anyone has written any thing like it before.

In case anyone wants to sample some of it, here is a Bitem. I am not sure these things work. I try them from my protfolio and they won't work. (Bitem is at the end of each offering up to chapter 10.)

First two chapters:

 The beginning. Chapters 1 & 2.  (13+)
This is how it all started
#1578672 by Author00


Thanks;

Author00
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Review of Emotions  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Not bad.
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Review by Author00
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Congers up many images as I read it. Interesting.

You do need to give it a good read - look for missing letters and mis-spelled words.
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Review by Author00
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Pretty interesting.

I was raised in east-central Illinois. Champaign-Urbana. I don't remember route 121
(though thats not surprising - there a lot of things I can't remember) .
I am farmilar with GreenUp, Decature, Lincoln, Clinton, Sprinigfield, Danville, Hayworth and a host of other little towns but that was a loing time ago.
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Review of My Last Night  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Pretty good.

For better rhythm I would put:
I know I'll lose without a doubt.
instead of:
I know I may lose without a doubt.

Also, instead of:
But you know it’s a lie!
I would put:
But you know thats a lie!

(But thats just me.)
Write on!
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Review of Begin Being  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I liked it.
It depicts 'modern humanity' which has rejected God.
Once we begin to think we are in control of our own destiny we are in a heap of trouble.
If we believe in God, but the majority are right and there is no god, there has been no harm done.
If you don't believe in God and there IS a God, you have condemned yourself, a lot of harm done!
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Review of Colors  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very good, with a few exceptions (in my opinion).
I would write "I'd go insain cause were not all ther same"
"If we dressed all the same you'd never be you"
This still may be a little akward.

In my opinion, the last stanza is incomplete.
Still a good piece.
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Review of East Dayton  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Pretty good, describing the hopelessness of some modern day youth.

To keep better rhythm, I would write 'progressing each day'.
Also 'maybe it's all in my head'
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Review of New thing to me  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like it. I have been there and done that.
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Review of Blushing  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Intriguing.

Write on.
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Review by Author00
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
The story sound good to me.
All you need to do is continue writing.
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Review of The search is on.  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Not a bad story but needs a lot of editing. (Miss spelled words and disjointed narrative.) It''s about a man looking for "the perfect girl" but there is no such thing!
That's why there are so many devorces. Everyone is looking for perfection, which does not exist. The same holds true for writing - there will never be perfection.
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Review of Prologue  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Interesting. At first, I thought the person was an alien but soon found out different.

When you write the book - a suggestion. The vampire could be killed by aids since that is a blood decease and not around when vampires were developed years ago.
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