It seems to me that you are talking about lighting? am I correct. or maybe a loved one who left her or passed away. And it looks like she is looking to replace the someone she lost. the rest of the poem does point to something that she (whoever or whatever she is) lost and she won't find her beloved anywhere because she is dead also.
This writer's pome is something that relates to me. All my life, I've lived on
an island in a fantasy world, these words are great. Everyone can relate to them at some time in their life. Maybe not an island but in some kind of fantasy world that only they can imagine.
not as good as I thought it would be. But the countdown and the time how long she had left to go was good. but the highness shoving her toes into the mouth of toadettes is getting old. It would be better if she has commanded her to "get over here and worship my feet with your tongue starting with my toes." one foot being tickled by the princes and the other being tickled with Minh T. tongue. is terrific.
this story is great. the author made every event clear and easy to understand. you can visualize what is actually happening, from the boy on the bus to the flower shop and eventually to "Her Highnesses castle. what a big surprise Toadette must of had when she heard the words “Open your mouth.” the only thing she thought about feet that were disgusting, and now looking at the biggest female feet she has ever seen yuck is the correct word. and now she is going to have to lick them. this story is promising. but I can only hope that there is some tickling as story continues. I will read more chapters.
this story is cool, when I was a boy, I did the same thing. But I wouldn't let the food touch each other. this author steps up the description of each of the compartments of food. the reconstruction of the food compartments is a great idea. it actually seems like it could work. my hat is off to you.
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