The suspense in the story prior to the love fest is good, the love fest is good. Well written. Left me believing the student dreamed the whole thing. I kept waiting for her to wake up with frustration or something. Very well written. I liked it.
Loved the story, keeping a human as a pet is too funny and cute. Poor girl is lost and you've showed that very well and her confusion. The dialogue was also well done and I liked the plot. With that said, you'll need to review and fix the misspelled words and punctuation. Very good story, keep up the writing, I really enjoyed reading it. :))
The story is emotional. It depicts life in real form, an experience that is all too familiar with our world. The butterfly was extremely touching, I liked it. I could feel the pain.
Some reviews need to be made, I was confused as to if it was the mother or the father visiting the little girl and some misspelling.
Keep up the writing, and thanks for sharing yours with us.
I dont know much about plays, but I really liked yours, it is true to life and men and thier buddy ways. The ending pleased with the original couple getting together even after the interference by a selfish friend. I liked the story and hope to read more in the future.
Well written, your vacabulary is great. I wish my vocabulary is as well as yours in this short story. Sad lady, but I could see into her soul the way you wrote this. And the action scenes around her were great as well.
I'll check in on your stories again.
Very true to facts, how woman can become trapped in something that wasn't of thier own making. I like the end, she is determined to change what she had become or let happen to her over the years.
An encouraging story..
I liked it..
I think she overcomes, starts her life anew, leaving behind all that overshadowing drama that her life had become...
Inspiring.
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