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Review of in the night  
Review by Cassidee
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved this poem, as much as I loved the Knight, also written by you. They seem alike, though obviously with different out comes, its good to write things with different perspectives, and you did a wonderful job, I like the 1st verse the best, and I want to let you know you did an awesome job.

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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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As promised, I have read your final posted chapter, and like the others before it, I think that you have done a magnificent job. You haven't skipped even a bit in your literary genius, and like the others, this one proves to be a great read, destined to print. I look forward to reading more of your story as you post it. Great job, and as always, write on!
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Review by Cassidee
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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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I saw your request in the CSFS forum, and thought since I was making my rounds that I could spare a moment...Just kidding, I always try to spare a minute to review our very own. Anyway, I saw that you would like for us to read to chapter two, but I thought I would review this chapter as well, as I have already reviewed your prologue.

So anyway, about your story. So far I love it, you have a way with words that makes it so easy to imagine, and I could easily see this as a published book. I would read it no doubt, your descriptions are just so well written, and your characters are nearly flawless. I love your way of writing, and I would love to read more. You did an excellent job, and now I'm off to read chapter 2. Wonderful job, and as always, write on!
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Review by Cassidee
Rated: E | (4.5)
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That was a very cute story, and I enjoyed it immensely. We had chickens when i was little, so I know of odd behavior among the foul, for one I had a white hen who crowed like a rooster each morning. If all men acted as your rooster has, the world could be a better place. Gentlemen are hard to find these days! I like how you gave your rooster a soul, as if though an animal, he understood, and thought as a human male. Great job, and as always, write on!
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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Humorous, short, sweet, and to the point! I loved it. I loved that it rhymed, as is always good with poetry, because it helps with flow. And I like that your poem almost sounded like a mother goose rhyme. It brought a smile to my face, and I thought it was very sweet. Great job, and always, write on!
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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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I loved your story, from the first heart pounding second, to the last enlightening moment. It was wonderfully creative, and so descriptive that I could nearly see the surroundings. Each word seemed to come off the page, inviting me deeper into the story. I would love to read more, and you did a great job. The only thing I would advise, it to use comas. They help the story flow, and make it easier to read. Thanks for a great read, and as always write on!
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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love it, great idea!
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Review of Mysterious Ways  
Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Amazing! There wasn't a single second when i was confused about what was happening, and this is a great feat, because I tend to confuse easily LOL. You did a wonderful job describing both the demon realm, and the human homestead in your plot. The demons were positively vile, and the angel radiant. She sounded so beautiful! I'm gad that the woman will get to have her child, because I was beginning to suspect she wasn't able, though I worry for the future of said child, it seems always has their hands on things they shouldn't have. I have not read anything else from you, so I don't know why the Imp had the feather, but you did a great job, and as always write on!
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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Excellent work. I found your story in the "review request" page, and thought It would be nice read your piece. You did a wonderful job creating a world, and its inhabitants, with a sci-fi feel, but an old world logic. You have great imagination, and an easy way with words that make your story flow with ease. My favorite part was the last bit though, as the story began to come together better during the soldiers dialogue. Wonderful job, and as always, write on!
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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Great job! I read your note, so i was prepared to be a little confused, but I wasn't. From the first sentence I knew they were in the midst of a battle and that your character is a confident soldier. I saw the giant in all his gory glory, and found his sluggish and clumsy. Your main character seems lithe and quick though, which made for an easy kill on her part. The king however, seemed vicious, and I fear he will give her quite a fight. My favorite part was when she tauntingly tried to give the overgrown monster pointers on fighting. You did a wonderful job, and you have a great vocabulary. As always, write on!
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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I have been seeing the "Show Don't Tell" a lot lately, so i thought should read something like this, and yours is the first I've come across, and while i don't know what its SUPPOSED to be like, I do know that you did a fantastic job writing this story. I was confused at first, but it became clear quickly what was happening, and I was interested in finding out more. I knew instantly what had happened to the babies mother, but at the same time, I knew that it would make things both easier, and harder on the new father. I'm not sure whether or not he is an adult, or maybe a young teenage father, but by his reaction to the new baby, I can tell that he is going to be a great father. Great job, and as always write on!
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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I read this, and I couldn't stop smiling! At some points it seems as if you are completely serious, then others its easy to see that you are joking, or at least I hope so! I loved everything about this piece, from the war paint, to the darkened closets. My favorite part was your suggestion for males to paint their nails black, because, while It is well known that SOME men DO paint their nails black, it isn't something MOST guys do, and the thought of majority of men painting their nails black is kinda comical to me. No judgment of course, to those who already do. You did a wonderful job, and I hope you got a good grade on it. Welcome back to WDC I hope you intend to stay this time.
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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I see that you are a member of CSFS and therefore possibly participating in the Raids, but I thought it would be nice to review some of our own, so here goes...

First off I want to say, that your piece is great, its imaginative, creative and descriptive.Your flow is great, and you did a wonderful job of giving the reader (namely me) a picture with which to imagine the scene taking place. Your story has a sci-fi kind of feel, and though I have never read your work and therefore know nothing of land you have created, I easily imagined what it must be like in your story. I enjoyed the the part where you wished the vacation could last forever, particularly, the last line. You did a great job, and I look forward to reading more from you at a later date.
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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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With every line I felt your pain, I heard the soul wrenching anguish. Your poem is beautiful to say the least, and I loved how you tried to rhyme in some places, but didn't make it a mandatory thing. I loved how easy it was to imagine to sorry you/your character must have felt. My favorite part was:

So spit those words and break me down,
cover me in spite just to watch me drown,
poison me with venom from your lips,
over and over again.

The passion is just so easily conveyed. Great job, ad as always, write on!
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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Excellent start, and a wonderfully imaginative idea! I especially like the character of Theresa and how you captured her personality in her thought process. I'm captivated by the plot, and the mysterious Ace. I would love to read more. The only thing I noticed, was that spacing in your dialogue makes it hard to understand which character is speaking. I would suggest maybe double spacing. Other than that, I think you have a really wonderful plot, and a great set up for your characters. Great job, and as always, write on!
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Review of My Dragon Heart  
Review by Cassidee
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very well done, my favorite was the 2nd to last paragraph:

"My Dragon King You have my heart
This Mortal shell shall now depart
You will find a lover new
To ride upon your mighty thew
Like me she too will death embrace
You find another in her place"

Good luck with the contest, and as always write on!
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Review of Time's Value  
Review by Cassidee
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I agree completely, though i only clip coupons in my spare time, and only one's i know for sure i'll use, such as diapers. It is true though what you say about spending time, to save time. It seems we as people are always asking for more time with one hand, while wasting it with the other. Excellent point of view.

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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That was a wonderful song, I really felt that anger of a woman scorned. I like that it rhymed, as it helped with the flow, and I like how you incorporated a story, that could be very personal if not for you , then for someone else. I especially like the chorus line, as it is versatile in that it can be used in either anger, sarcasm, or even teasing. Depending on whether the mother is talking to the child or the ex-husband, it could be used for either.

I enjoyed your song, and i really felt the pain on display here. Wonderful job.


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Review by Cassidee
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That was a wonderful song, I really felt that anger of a woman scorned. I like that it rhymed, as it helped with the flow, and I like how you incorporated a story, that could be very personal if not for you , then for someone else. I especially like the chorus line, as it is versatile in that it can be used in either anger, sarcasm, or even teasing. Depending on whether the mother is talking to the child or the ex-husband, it could be used for either.

I enjoyed your song, and i really felt the pain on display here. Wonderful job.

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Review by Cassidee
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That was a wonderful song, I really felt that anger of a woman scorned. I like that it rhymed, as it helped with the flow, and I like how you incorporated a story, that could be very personal if not for you , then for someone else. I especially like the chorus line, as it is versatile in that it can be used in either anger, sarcasm, or even teasing. Depending on whether the mother is talking to the child or the ex-husband, it could be used for either.

I enjoyed your song, and i really felt the pain on display here. Wonderful job.

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Review of The Vision  
Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow, entertaining, intriguing and well worth the read. I worry that Chelsae's last words sound like a threat, especially after her episode. The teacher is right to be concerned, though I would like to read more, I give this short interlude two thumbs up! Great job, wonderfully done, and as always write on!

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Review of Nocturne Remorse  
Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love this! An amazing poem for the prompt, and a great job with the rhyming, lyrical as it may be, this is a great summary of the picture I myself did not see when I wrote my own entry. Great job with the prompt, and great job with the poem, definitely my favorite so far! As always, write on!

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Review of SORCERESS  
Review by Cassidee
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I think I would catalog this under poetry though I'm not sure what kind as it is not really my strong point, I liked that your wrote it based on the letters SORCERESS, and that it depicted a woman, clearly independent and powerful daring any to contradict her, in so few words. This definitely gave me a few ideas of my own, great job, and wonderful writing. As always write on!


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Review by Cassidee
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow, very elaborate, it exactly what I'd expect a native story to summarize. Though I am a little lost to the plot, more like non-fiction, it almost seems like something some would say about death. Did your character die? Is this about self identification, a spirit journey maybe? I have not seen the painting you used as inspiration, but reading this makes me want to check it out. Wonderful writing! And as always Write on!


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