This essay was just what I needed when I needed it. Very inspirational and motivational. I've been writing what I call "poetry" for sometime now (on and off for ten years, a lot more recently) simply cause I enjoy it. I like the "word paintings" I can create. What I usually create is 'pseudo poetic prose' (as I see it) often without any planned structure. So what usually results is a subconscious word vocalization, sometimes good, sometimes bad; which I'm glad is O.K. Now I'm spending more time trying to train that vocalization so it's easily more accessible.
That's how I've looked at showers sometimes before. I think for humans water will always have that purifying and cleansing quality to it. (Guess that's cause it does :p)
Quick question before I say anything more, since I too am new to poetry/writing, is there a certain rhythm or flow this is to be read?
Suggestion: Maybe change either the font or make the size bigger as it's busy and somewhat distracting cause the text looks cramped, especially when re-reading it.
Since I'm new to poetry/writing and reviewing I can't really critique too much. That's why, for now, the highest I'll give out is 4/5; but that's my 5/5. :)
I really like the whole process of a forest fire you described. Starting with the tiny, almost insignificant spark that takes over a big, strong tree. Only to rapidly grow and consume all others around till it can no longer "eat", so it starves. I was really able to picture the whole event well.
I see it's under the "emotional" genre, so from the looks of it, I'm personally seeing a comparison to a quick and intense love/lust type of situation. Whatever "sparked" your inspiration for it, I think it was well put together.
This is, for me, essentially what i would write for my grandma too. As I'm sure many others would also. I like how well you were able to "word paint" a picture of who your grandma was and the connection you had with her. Really reminds me of my own grandma. Great reminder that one should enjoy their family while they can, before they can't. Glad I saw this.
So, first off, I'm going to say I'm new here, so I may not be the best at reviewing.
Anyways, I agree with your entry/opinion and understand the point you're making. I would just say when mentioning "Americans" let the reader really know that it's most/some Americans. Especially in certain groups and age ranges so it doesn't sound like ALL Americans are like that.
It is very sad though that many are so narrow minded when it comes to music and all art forms really.
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