Good poem, sad. I'm sorry to read about your dad passing away. My dad past way Sept 2nd. It's been about four years. I wrote a poem for my dad too. It's call "Dreams of Dad". Be blessed,stay strong, and you have his memory with you always.
Great tips, I am very aware of the scammer's. I know that if you are promised that your poem will end up in a book somewhere possibly in the library, I wouldn't believe them. I've been through that but had the commen sense to not follow through. Don't worry, I wasn't out any money cause I didn't fork over the money.
About the entry fees to some of these poem, I wasn't aware some of the entry fees would cost that much. Aren't there free ones where they won't scam you? Or does it always cost?
Very good!! I like it. The story was well put together and kept the story focused the main character. I really enjoyed reading it and loo forward to reading more.
I like the essay, it was personal and showed what you had to endure has a teenager. I'm sorry that your granparents were the way they were and hope that you have reconciled with them as well like did your mother. It's easy to forgive than it is to forget. I've been through alot of things as a teenager also. You appreciate the life you have now and learn from the bad and the good of any situation. I commend you for getting out of the situation you were in and hope your life is better for it. Keep writing.
Ok, I like the story and I understand that it was for a short story that only allowed 55 words, but it really doesn't introduce to me the child or the father, the location is there. You titled it "Paper World", but you talked of paper bonds. Are you talking of money or stocks or material thing. "From the vale of relations, he passed helplessly. Hope faded away from his world.", did the child die? It has some potential to make a good short story but has a lot of missing peices in the story. I'd like to read more.
I really liked your poem and the sad turn of events. I like the feeling and the wistfullness of the young and growing older. Loseing a loved one is never easy and my condolence to you losing a loving husband and soulmate. Thanks for sharing and keep writing. I look forward to reading more.
I thought it was good even though I had to read it twice to actually get the meaning. I realized that it must've been cloudy where you were at and showing signs of rain.
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