I agree with you whole-heartedly about the charm of this new poetry form. Its fluidity as I read each line is flawless. I also like the way it tells a story to the readers. I didn't see any spelling, grammatical or punctuation errors. Awesome write my friend!
I really felt sorry for the character in this poem. Our first time is supposed to be special; a moment to remember and cherish. For this young girl is was the exact opposite.
I must admit that the desperation the character exudes in this poem is distressing. No one should have to beg to be loved. Love just happens. It not something we can force upon another person. Your character is needy and very insecure.
Looking at the composition of this piece I will say that I don't see any issues with the form and there were no errors found. Good luck in the contest.
This is a great poem that honors St. Patrick. I will say that the bit 'o irish speak in it is hard to get used to. Nevertheless you have given a great tribute to a wonderful saint and provided some history for your readers at the same time. The overall form of the poem is fine, there are no errors but I did find the meter to be off in a few places. This however does not effect the integrity of the piece. Write on!
Wow! If I were able to actually sit down and set a list of goals for myself I might actually get something accomplished. You seem to have everything in order. I'm impressed. I will keep my fingers crossed for you.
Despite the fact that you are a career woman and a mother of two, you seem to be doing a wonderful job with your writing. I took a quick peek through your port and saw that you have a huge collection of short stories. I can hardly wait to read some of them. What I like the most about your work is your attention to detail. I rarely come across an error. That says a great deal about you.
Good luck with this list Steph. I'll be rooting for you.
This is the first of 15 reviews I owe you from your ODTG Auction win.
Since I will be spending some time in your port I thought I would get to know you a bit first. I find that fact that you are a 911 dispatcher quite exciting. I don't know if I could do it.
You are so fortunate to have been able to see the world the way you have. I have only ever been on a plane once and I was just a year old! Your little guy in the picture is adorable. I can see why you would want to gush. I noticed that Andrew and I share the same birthday. Wish him a good one from me.
Thank you for sharing some of your life with us. I am on to my next review.
Along with your nomination, you are also receiving the the Hemingway Fan Package! The package includes a total of 9 reviews from our FAN - ATIC gifters ! I'm thrilled you were chosen for this honor
The harsh reality of this poem had me in tears. It is so difficult for me to think about the countless woman who have lost their lives at the hands of someone they loved. I hope your poem reaches out to some of then before it is too late.
I didn't find any issues with the form of this poem and no spelling or grammatical errors were found.
Warmest Best, Damiana
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The strength and determination you have to overcome life's obstacles is amazing. I think the poem you wrote for you sister called "She's a Rock", also applies to you. After reading all of the poems I have, it has given me a renewed strength to deal with the issues I face head on.
Exceptional writing Pat. This review concludes the 15 you won in the ODTG Auction.
Yes! I am rooting for you all the way in this awesome poem. You have taken a stand against your demons and it looks to me that you have won. The power that comes from the words in this poem are moving. Terrific!
The overall flow of this poem is great. There are no spelling or grammatical errors. Write on!
The poem is so heart breaking. I could feel your frustration as I read each word. Being a parent isn't easy but it is even harder when dealing with things we have o control over. My heart goes out to you. I can see how strong you are with each poem I read. You have an inner strength that I admire. Keep writing my friend.
I am a huge fan of Acrostic poetry and this one is lovely. I think I like them so much because you can add special effects that make the poem really stand out as you have done with this one. The message of this poem is sincere and heart warming. Another winner Pat.
Dealing with the loss of a loved one is never easy but knowing that God has called them home may offer some relief. You have written a heart warming poem for your sister and I am sure it meant the world to her. In closing I will say that there were no errors found.
The way in which you have described your triumph over depression is inspiring. I know how devastating the effects of this disorder can be. Your words are very uplifting and give the reader hope.
I do have a small suggestion for this poem. Since you are talking about a rainbow, I think it would look good if you added colored font to each. Not that I don't think it isn't good enough now....
I couldn't agree with you more about the wonder and splendor of God's gracious gifts. I love this poem because it shows the reader all of the glory God has created for us. The overall flow of this poem is flawless and I didn't find any errors. I am really enjoying my trek through your port.
I wish I would have been able to read something like this 16 years ago when I lost my Dad. I think it would have helped me get over my grief a lot sooner.
I am amazed at how easily writing seems to be for you. The words flow so freely. I sense from your work that you are a woman of integrity. This is another great piece.
This is a lovely poem and it shows the reader that our prayers can be answered. The response you received from Karen showcases the star quality in your writing. You have a wonderful gift Pat.
There were no grammatical or spelling errors in this poem. Write on!
This is the first review of 15 from the package you won in the ODTG Auction some time ago.
I was really inspired after reading this poem. It showed me that you have a strong character and seem to have your feet well rooted. The poem was easy to read and I found it well written. There were no spelling errors noted.
The last stanza is my favorite. There is much truth in what you have written. I look forward to reading more.
This is an amazingly vivid poem and you have executed the Pantoum style perfectly. I would like to see you add some punctuation to this piece. The overall flow is great and there were no errors found. Thanks for sharing it. Keep up the good work.
I really enjoyed this poem. I think snakes are fascinating; they feel so cool! I had a 6 foot Boa Constrictor around my neck when I was in my early 20's. What an experience that was.
I didn't see any technical issues in your poem and there were no errors found. Thanks for sharing.
I can't say that I would ever want to know what it was like to be blind by putting glue in my eyes. Closing them and walking around gives us the same sensation. Thank goodness this story is fiction.
Once again, you have good composition in this story and it is error free.
For a flash fiction story this is quite believable. You did a great job bringing your character to life and also that of a dead man. Nice touch!
I didn't see anything wrong with the overall composition of this story. All of the punctuation is correct and I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors.
I had the feeling something was going to go wrong as soon as Lagrima gave Isaac the potion. If she had only told him her true feelings she wouldn't have succumb to her own poison.
I think you did quite well with this story. Your characters were believable and it had a strong storyline. I didn't see any spelling errors and all of the grammar is fine. Nice write!
I was completely mesmerized by the stunning scene you have described in this story. I was lifted up and swept away right from the beginning. I felt a sense of calm as I read this wonderful story.
In my opinion, the composition of this story is perfect and it is also free from error. Excellent write my friend.
I thoroughly enjoyed this beautiful and eloquent poem. You paint a clear and vivid picture for your readers. There is a strong rhyme scheme present in this poem and it compliments the overall meter. I didn't find any spelling or grammatical errors. Great write fellow poet.
Losing a loved one isn't easy especially when it's a grandparent. Your poem emanates your grief and sadness from her passing. I didn't find any techincally issues with the form of this poem but the meter is rough in a few places. There were no errors found though. I hope time will help you heal. Keep writing too; it's great therapy.
I had tears in my eyes when I read this story. It touched my heart and I could relate to the "empty nest" feeling. Of course it wasn't the same for me because while my oldest left I still have three at home.
Your story takes the reader through a range of emotions. I love the picture of Bear you included with this story. She is gorgeous! Your story my friend is perfect. I can't think of anything that would improve it. I hope you are going to tell us what happened with the disclosure of the "I'm getting married," story.
Write On!
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! I'm thrilled you were chosen for this honor 
Damiana
